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Ink Empress' I Breathe Contest...written 19 Nov 24 ...based on the past experience of my older cousin

I Breathe Pain


I breathe in the pungent flavor of pain,
the bitter taste in nightfall's weeping
as stars hide behind gray- washed posts , rain suffocating a prayer 
for comfort, a sorrowful litany 
echoing among drained dew...

Lost, alone in melange of grieving
thoughts of fragile child ,
lost and thiefed by dark virus from  cell's weakened body--

I clutch babe's pashima until
silence breaks the spell
of another morn,
 raw and stained from unrequited dreams,    from
 a mother's fervor locked in chains
never to be caressed with care...

Into frozen cuddle disarranged by lacerated dreams, oh  infant falls
asleep innocent of pale slumber
somewhere...where?
While I,  a woman drenched
  by restless agony lay among grasses
coiled with a box of lullabies
only to drown and spill my being,

as I breathe in 
the bitter scream of farewell.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Peranteau Avatar
January 3, 2025 at 6:15 AM
when my grandson died, I had to take his lifeless from the doctor, my son couldn't lift his grief from the floor...this write still az I speak to you haz me...yeah, haz me...fine fine fine write dear poet! Happy New Year love....much love
Empress Avatar
November 29, 2024 at 2:52 AM
Dear nette, this is so poignant and heart wrenching really, how youv written especially in a way that would make readers feel and grasp the depth of grief, of a mother engrossed in all the memories and loss of a child, i felt this so strongly! Especially felt the lines “ While I, a woman drenched by restless agony lay among grasses coiled with a box of lullabies only to drown and spill my being” i cant even imagine! The pain. Thank you for sharing this. Congratulations on your win.
Beaufort Avatar
November 25, 2024 at 10:03 AM
Nette, when death comes, it affects those of us still living to deal with the sorrow. You point out the pain eloquently. Nothing can take this away from us.
M  Avatar
November 20, 2024 at 10:31 AM
Oh how incredibly sad and powerful Nette…..l felt the pure pain and loss in your words. I couldn't even begin to imagine the pain of losing a child…Debx
Daniel Avatar
November 20, 2024 at 7:04 AM
Very painful and dramatically described, Nette:)
Hind Avatar
November 19, 2024 at 5:15 PM
A raw but gifted work - such beautiful language.. I'm sure your cousin was comforted by this; how can she not be? I'm in awe of this one, Nette. <3
Wolf Avatar
November 28, 2024 at 8:34 PM
I agree --- except I find it polished, Nette. Bravo! ~ Gershon
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