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For Contest: I Breathe

Sponsor: Ink Empress

17 November 2024
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I breathe; I think; I slumber and I wake I feel; I hear; I scream for pity’s sake I push; I shove with little left to give But six feet neath new fallen leaves, I live I breathe the fumes of my putrefaction As I lie cramped with limited action I hear the sound of my life below ground Six hundred years worth of worms slinking round I feel the splinters of oak ’neath my nails Each - one less day till persistence prevails I sense that I shall enjoy the night soon And be undead by the light of my moon And now, there it is; the smell of the night Your silver glint in the sky gives me flight Those who interred me are many years dead Their progeny live; and I must be fed Shall any man notice your renewed glee Your moonlight to them is daylight to me I knew you were waiting, o light of mine For we are coupled by ancient design Warm me, my moon, my midnight accomplice Restore my flesh; we’ve much to accomplish Descendants of men who left you to grieve Shall scream in the night when they hear me breathe

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Date: 1/10/2025 12:41:00 AM
Hey Terry I just came across this just now and I love it. A POE-m in my book. Such great imagery and atmosphere. Nice one. Cheers - Gary
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Date: 1/10/2025 3:23:00 PM
I’m always a little chuffed when an old(ish) poem gets some attention as they most often seem to fall off the edge of the world. so I’m chuffed that you found this and delighted that you enjoyed it. My head’s a bit of a vacuum right now; plenty of writes going nowhere but nothing concrete to share. So thanks for the Poe comparison, Gary… I’m suitably flattered ;-)
Date: 11/29/2024 5:30:00 PM
Congratulations Terry! I'm glad to see your captivating poem placed in Inks contest. Well done my friend :-)
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Date: 12/1/2024 12:01:00 PM
Thanks, Anne. Appreciated
Date: 11/29/2024 3:50:00 AM
Dear Terry, i loved reading this and the way youv expressed throughout in such creative ways really stood out for me: especially the way youv written “ I sense that I shall enjoy the night soon And be undead by the light of my moon“ as someone that loves the moon those lines resonated and more! “ Warm me, my moon, my midnight accomplice Restore my flesh; we’ve much to accomplish” just so very beautiful!!! Love that ending. Your use of nature to depict your thoughts is what makes this worthy of a win! Thank you for sharing: congratulations on your win.
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Date: 12/1/2024 11:59:00 AM
Thank you. Wasn’t sure it was what you were looking for, so I’m chuffed with a placement. Terry
Date: 11/21/2024 3:53:00 AM
This is such a cool write, Terry. I just wanted to read more (lol) Awesome my friend. Best wishes in the contest. Cheers Charlie
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Date: 11/21/2024 2:42:00 PM
Thanks, Charlie. Cool AND awesome… dare I ask for more. Much appreciated. Terry
Date: 11/20/2024 2:02:00 PM
I wrote a great comment earlier and then it wouldn’t post. Hopefully this one will. This write is bonechillingly haunting! Those kin best run where the beast can’t find them, but I think he might… Fave!
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Date: 11/20/2024 2:46:00 PM
Glad you enjoyed so much, Kim. And a fave is always a welcome pat on the back. Much appreciated. Terry
Date: 11/20/2024 12:23:00 PM
Hi Terry. Another enjoyable read for me today and the last stanza was the perfect bone chilling ending to your well crafted story :-) Have you seen the TV series "A discovery of Witches?
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Date: 11/20/2024 2:44:00 PM
Oops, sorry, not sure about ‘A discovery of witches’, I do a bit of googling..,
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Date: 11/20/2024 2:43:00 PM
Thank you, Anne. It does seem that I may have fallen into the same trap as you regarding the ‘third word’. I was too late to change mine as the contest is closed. I do feel there was room for interpretation, so we’ll wait and see ;-)
Date: 11/20/2024 10:50:00 AM
this is a really good poem, Terry, especially kind of creepy , good for Halloween! I am seeing others like you writing I Breate for the title. But go look at Ink's rules again. She wants you to write about a noun such as I Breate Poetry/ I breathe happiness, etc. Hope people notice this!
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Date: 11/20/2024 11:23:00 AM
Thanks for the heads up, Andrea. Thought I’d look into the possibility of adapting this. Alas, I see the contest is closed, so I’ll take my chances, as I have no way of knowing if Inky has already read it. Glad you enjoyed, nonetheless.
Date: 11/20/2024 9:29:00 AM
A brilliant write Terry….you do serious and dark well also my FF…..Debx
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Date: 11/20/2024 11:27:00 AM
Thanks, Deb. Seems I might have misinterpreted the requirements, so I might be in line for an NA to add to my collection. C’est la vie ;-)
Date: 11/18/2024 9:05:00 PM
Rx: 'Halloween Hangover!' Extreme candy-eating recommended for 48 hours. That should do the trick, Slick!... Seriously, another masterpiece, Terry! Thanks, gw
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Date: 11/19/2024 2:52:00 PM
I’ll settle for ‘masterpiece’ GW. Thanks. I’m off to the candy store ;-)
Date: 11/17/2024 10:53:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your wonderful "I Breathe" write. "Good Luck"  Have a blessed day writing away.................
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Date: 11/19/2024 2:44:00 PM
Thanks, Paula. Not sure Inky was looking for spooky, but I don’t do hearts and flowers ;-)

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