Poet Tacito Poet Free verse

I Ask You This

“If I have to cry to keep you, I will keep weeping.”- The Temptations

If our atmosphere
Becomes a shattered animosity

If our cumulus clouds
Become wrecking balls against our Sun

If the touch of your hands,
Turns into rabid, feline tongue

If your messages of clarity & “I love you” 
Translate into a Mime’s distress signal

If the sway of your rosemary breaths
Disappear

I ask you

Would your love
Your real love
Really
Truly
Make me shed oceanic leaks

While you ride leaky canoe
Above our water garden

Never tossing raft

Never diving in
To become my lighthouse savior

Because love
Real love
Should never
Ever
Make you embrace torment’s cry

Nor should love
Ever reciprocate
With muted stanzas

Date stamped:
“Return to Sender”

©Drake J. Eszes

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Jack Jordan December 24, 2013 at 9:07 AM Blake, thank you for your kind and generous support this past year. May you have a fine Christmas and a fantastic 2014... Jack Poet Tacito December 27, 2013 at 8:40 AM My good man, Jack, you too! Thanks so much! =)

Abdulhafeez Oyewole December 8, 2013 at 7:29 PM An exquisite piece, Drake. Well done! Poet Tacito December 9, 2013 at 9:22 AM Hi & thanks very much!

Aiyah Torres December 4, 2013 at 12:14 PM drama and love, a perfect combination to express one's deep emotion... I was carried away with those lines,can't even stop my heart for beatting...I felt it!!! you amde me fall in love again...fantastic!!!..one love_AiyaH :") Poet Tacito December 4, 2013 at 12:33 PM A deeply awesome comment. Thank you so much, Aiyah! =)

Daisy Goodman November 26, 2013 at 11:08 AM This is a beautiful poem! nothing can move me more than being still and reading. :) Poet Tacito November 26, 2013 at 11:22 AM Hi Daisy!!! Nice of you to drop in. :) Thank you so much for that charming comment.

Andrea Dietrich November 7, 2013 at 4:26 PM LOVE the message in this one. SO TRUE!! Poet Tacito November 8, 2013 at 10:37 AM Thank you very much for that, Andrea. =)

Shirley Candy November 7, 2013 at 3:16 PM A perfect seven! Amazing poem with such a dramatic ending. Going to my fave. Thank you for sharing this, DD. xoxo Poet Tacito November 7, 2013 at 3:44 PM =D You have no idea how much I appreciate that, PS. You're truly awesome.

John Loving Iii November 7, 2013 at 12:39 PM fantastic fantasy. Poet Tacito November 7, 2013 at 12:42 PM Indeed it is, John! =D Thank you so much!

Laura Breidenthal November 4, 2013 at 8:56 PM Amazing verse. Your words are exceptional and mesmerizing. Hell no - I'd never return something so awesome :D hahah Always, Laura Poet Tacito November 7, 2013 at 12:10 PM A smart move, Laura. =D Thank you so much!

Donna Jones November 3, 2013 at 6:42 PM Hey Drake...I'm patient I guess...there is that point caring tears turn to pain..then respect is lost...thanks for the wonderful poem sir Poet Tacito November 3, 2013 at 6:47 PM Some are patient, yes. I can understand what you're saying definitely. No argument there. Thank you so much, Donna. :)

John Posey November 3, 2013 at 3:11 PM I really enjoyed this one, partly because I believe I chose the correct corridor of understanding. I spoke of some of the same emotions in my post, "True Love Never Knows Why." The silence of a love unreturned results in an almost unbearable pain. Growing doubt of someone's love for you is hard to bear. I believe we use ink from the same inkwell, but use different quills. Nice, writing. BTW thanks for your comment on "Eternal Hope." I left you a reply on it. -Jake always respecting your craft. Poet Tacito November 3, 2013 at 4:42 PM Cheers to you for this. Seriously. Epic comment. I have been on both ends of the spectrum. I see what youre saying loud and clear. Damn. Thanks so much, John.

Monterey Sirak November 3, 2013 at 8:58 AM A stunning write! Love the ending. How sad when love loses its way in the echoing mazes of silence. Poet Tacito November 3, 2013 at 9:05 AM You are quite right, Monterey. Quite right. Thanks so much!

James Marshall Goff November 3, 2013 at 7:01 AM Free flowing art! Nice! Jimbo Poet Tacito November 3, 2013 at 8:12 AM JIMBO! Many thanks sir!!!! =D

Carrie Richards November 2, 2013 at 3:12 PM Clouds described as 'wrecking balls' against the sun........omg........how your mind conjures up such amazing and wonderful lines.......I am always in awe !! As always.....I loved this one! Poet Tacito November 3, 2013 at 8:12 AM You leave me in that same awe, Carrie. True story! You're are SUPER sweet. Thank you so much!

Cherie Thomas November 2, 2013 at 2:35 PM Hi Drake wow those last 2 stanzas really sum, these fantastic words up. I miss your.poetry:) tyfs...Cherie:0) Poet Tacito November 3, 2013 at 8:10 AM Hey Cherie! It's been ages! :) How have you been doing? Thank you very much. Ending have to hit hard. I'm glad that did it for you.

Richard Lamoureux November 2, 2013 at 9:04 AM Stopped by to read the comments. You have some really good ones here. Poet Tacito November 2, 2013 at 10:23 AM Awesome. :)

Lisa Mccall November 2, 2013 at 9:00 AM Wow breath taking. Loved this write. By far one of my favorite poems. you have such great talent. Poet Tacito November 2, 2013 at 10:21 AM Hey Lisa! Thank you very much. You're very kind to say that. :)

Sandra Adams November 1, 2013 at 9:16 PM no real love should not make us embrace torments cry...though sometimes it does, made me think of the song by brandy, have you ever loved somebody so much it makes you cry...I think many of us can say we have...now you have me pondering so many thoughts as good poetry often does...excellent poem Drake... from a sincere and beautiful heart it flows :) hugs Poet Tacito November 2, 2013 at 1:45 AM Yes, having been on both sides of the fence, I can say it can make us cry. But, that's kind of when you know. That Brandy song is a good example, certainly. I'm glad this is making you think. Thanks so much, Sandra!

Kelly Deschler November 1, 2013 at 5:09 PM I completely agree with you! True and honest love should never make us cry. The only tears that fall, should be tears of joy. An excellent poem, Drake, very emotional and heartfelt. I loved it! Poet Tacito November 1, 2013 at 5:11 PM Yes. Right there. Absolutely! It may not always happen that way. But, damn if I ain't going to try! :) Thanks so much, Kelly!

Liam Mcdaid November 1, 2013 at 5:03 PM superbly penned beautifully Poet Tacito November 1, 2013 at 5:08 PM Thanks a lot, Liam!

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper November 1, 2013 at 3:49 PM Wow, yeah I read this and almost had thoughts of another popular song "Tears of a Clown" by Smokey and the Miracles LOL! Though, the romantic in me is still touched by the gesture...Great lines by you though! MC Poet Tacito November 1, 2013 at 4:28 PM YES! Good call! Great classic. Yes, I can understand why. Many thanks, Marquis!

Anne-Lise Andresen November 1, 2013 at 7:54 AM - Those who do not dare to open their hearts, will never experience true love ..... - Open mind, let the sun  in .... - oxox // Anne-Lise :) Poet Tacito November 1, 2013 at 8:52 AM Amen to that. =) Thank you, Anne Lise!!!

Nette Onclaud October 31, 2013 at 12:11 PM sometimes, the best way to love the self back is to end something that no longer works for us, no matter how hard this can be....heart-wrenching, drake yet fearless, definite, and empowering...darn superb write!..:) hugggs! Poet Tacito October 31, 2013 at 12:19 PM So. Very. True. Your perspective moves me. Thank you so much, Nette. =D

Richard Lamoureux October 31, 2013 at 9:38 AM I enjoyed the dialogue this piece creates. I would say that all are worth the tears and if they are not we haven't gotten to know them well enough. Sometimes we have been hurt in ways that prevent us from seeing or being seen and in the end we miss out on the magic that exists at the core of each of us. Poet Tacito October 31, 2013 at 9:41 AM Quite right. You are a glass half-full heart. Humanity needs more folks like you for the long haul. Thank you kindly, Richard. Richard Lamoureux October 31, 2013 at 9:39 AM I have added to my favorites!

Jay Loveless October 31, 2013 at 7:12 AM Breathe taking Drake. I have to love your writes, they are so beautiful, leaving me speechless. I cant choose a favorite line <3 Poet Tacito November 1, 2013 at 5:09 PM LOL awesome! =D Otherwise, I'll order you an oxygen tank off Amazon or Ebay. ;-) Jay Loveless October 31, 2013 at 4:41 PM Haha Ill remember to be sure to catch it, a trick to do around your writing Poet Tacito October 31, 2013 at 7:19 AM Hey there, Jay! :) Just be sure to catch your breath, ok? I can't have any reader of mine fainting on me, flattering as it is. =D I'm glad you stopped by. Thank you very much!

Christy Ralph October 31, 2013 at 12:31 AM I'm speechless after i read this. So beautifully written. Drake you're so talented! Its excellent! Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem with us! Poet Tacito October 31, 2013 at 6:30 AM Hi there, Christine! :) Very cool of you to stop by! I do appreciate that. Thank you so much!

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