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I Am But a Mortal Craving Your Existence

You are a bright fallen star from the mesmerizing sight up above, You make my tender heart pump pure blood of joy with just a minor glance, If only you would grant me the blissful privilege to call you my love, To my painful despair your angelic nose is pointed to the sky and you look down upon me, If only given the honour to acknowledge my existence that craves your mystical romance, But because of my economic status and laughable looks me, you shall never see, As more than a dirty petty jester who could never compare to your immense power, I am foolish to ever have thought I stood a pleading chance, To you your majesty I will forever bow down and cower, Until I feel your heart beat back then I shall manoeuvre into my sprinting stance. June 12, 2018 Rhyme Time 4- 10 Lines Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Laura Loo 3rd Place

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/16/2018 5:19:00 PM

You captured well the way a person feels to be looked down upon. There were a few people who made me feel this way in my life. Great job and belated congrats.

Eve Roper

Date: 6/30/2018 11:22:00 AM

Congratulations, Haley, on your win.. Lovely poem Hugs Eve ~`*

Haley Fisher
Date: 7/8/2018 5:26:00 PM

Thank you very much. It was fun to write.

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 6/29/2018 9:57:00 PM

Very fresh and creative, and an excellent interpretation of the theme, phrased with intent and imagery! Congratulations on your wonderful win, Haley - blessings and best wishes for continued success, my friend! :-) <3

Haley Fisher
Date: 6/29/2018 11:51:00 PM

Thank you so much for your kind words and encouragement.

Susan Gentry

Date: 6/29/2018 7:33:00 PM

Congratulations. Written from the heart and goes so well with your theme. :)

Haley Fisher
Date: 6/29/2018 11:39:00 PM

Thank you Susan. I really appreciate it. It was a fun theme.

Joseph May

Date: 6/29/2018 1:13:00 PM

Congrats on your win Haley..

Haley Fisher
Date: 6/29/2018 11:38:00 PM

Thank you very much Joseph.

John Gondolf

Date: 6/29/2018 8:52:00 AM

Haley, back to say congrats! John

Haley Fisher
Date: 6/29/2018 11:47:00 PM

Thank you John .

Lu Loo

Date: 6/29/2018 7:10:00 AM

great poem sweet Haley, really enjoyed it...thank you for your entry and congratulations on your placement. Be blessed, -luloo :)

Haley Fisher
Date: 6/29/2018 7:33:00 AM

Thank you so much. I really enjoyed this contest. It was extremely creative which I think helps me learn how to write more interesting poetry.

John Gondolf

Date: 6/25/2018 5:46:00 PM

Your poems are all written with such strong emotion, Haley, nicely done. Best of luck in the contest. John

Haley Fisher
Date: 6/26/2018 1:27:00 PM

Thank you John. I'm glad strong emotion comes through my written words.

Robert Lindley

Date: 6/20/2018 10:33:00 AM

Another heartfelt and glowing jewel you have crafted my friend. Stay true to thy art, to thy heart's truth and love's bidding. Let thy ink paste art upon the page.. A fav...

Haley Fisher
Date: 6/23/2018 8:05:00 AM

Thank you so much. I feel encouraged by your beautifully written words.