Humbling Firmament

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INSPIRED BY White Wolf and his poetry and narrative.

Between heaven and earth is so much more
You and I are for instance, but before
We were, there was and forever will be
The imprint of who will be you and me

Through closed eyelids rosy light glows warm
Swaying left and right in golden sundust swarm
My wheels so insignificantly leave prints in timeless
Everlasting sand, tossed in tides, boundless

In faraway blue green, a scaled-down ship
Moves motionless, on a never ending trip
And we, beneath a humbling firmament
See immense constellations with no end

We sit here silent, hand in hand meditating
How balance in this world, weighing
On us, harmonizes love and awe in us both
Reconciliation of life, we speak our silent oath

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January 29, 2017

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 1/30/2017 7:33:00 AM
Deep in thought on this one, I suspect, Duir! Excellently portrayed!
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Darren White
Date: 1/30/2017 7:34:00 AM
You and your lessons are the inspiration for this poem Budgie, I'll add that to it !
Date: 1/29/2017 6:48:00 PM
Soothing and lovely!
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Darren White
Date: 1/29/2017 10:54:00 PM
Thank you, Kim :)
Date: 1/29/2017 2:07:00 PM
such an amazing portrait you painted with your poem... breathtaking <3
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Darren White
Date: 1/29/2017 2:12:00 PM
Thank you, my friend :)
Date: 1/29/2017 12:19:00 PM
Hi Darren, Eloquent, moving and thought provoking.
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Darren White
Date: 1/29/2017 1:04:00 PM
Thank you so much :)
Date: 1/29/2017 11:31:00 AM
This works well, Darren. The opening stanza is stunning. Love "Move motionless on a never-ending trip", the story of my life as journey. In fact, after several readings, I have to confess: I wish I wrote this. JH
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Darren White
Date: 1/29/2017 11:39:00 AM
John, thank you! This is a huge compliment :) That journey yes, it seems like standing still, doesn't it?
Date: 1/29/2017 10:43:00 AM
absolutely breathtaking Darren oh so so beautiful am adding this gem to my faves:-) hugs jan xx
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Darren White
Date: 1/29/2017 11:42:00 AM
Thanks for the fave Jan :D I am glad you like it :)
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