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Huck's River

Huck's River

Down on the river we slow movin'
Driftin' along without reprovin'
From any one or their behoovin'
Livin' life free from all disprovin'

But there's a price for this free-livin'
Without no rules some be misgivin'
Takin' what's yours with no thanks givin'
Driftin' along can be quite sievin'

With freedom responsibility
Comes or this life breeds futility 
Raftin' the river's docility 
Can lead to rapid hostility...

deborah burch©12.18.16
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Robert Lindley

Date: 12/27/2016 2:55:00 PM

Love this finely crafted piece. As well as the country style slang words you used to rhyme! I have several poems using much the same words myself... A7 THANKS FOR THE NOTIFICATION OF THE TYPO IN MY POEM PRESENTED TODAY..

Deborah Burch
Date: 12/27/2016 3:33:00 PM

Lol! thank you Robert!! You're so kind. And you're very welcome!! That's why we're soup right? To help each other? It's my take on it!! ;) big hugs

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/23/2016 6:15:00 PM

I like how you did it country style. Makes you think of the days of Tom and Huckleberry Fin!! Nicely done, Deborah.

Deborah Burch
Date: 12/23/2016 8:25:00 PM

Thank you! Andy!!!:) Big Hugggs!! Deb

Doug Vinson

Date: 12/19/2016 9:11:00 PM

Ha! Love it, Deb. Told my math teacher I lost my homework in the river, and she (rightly) rolled her eyes at me in scorn. Oh well, the answer for this poem is still the square root of 49. I'm also reminded that, "With Mogwai comes much responsibility."

Doug Vinson
Date: 12/21/2016 3:01:00 PM

: ) Deb you are so aware of many good things.

Deborah Burch
Date: 12/20/2016 9:27:00 AM

Lol!! Absolutely Doug!! No eating after midnight!!!!:p And no water! Thank you!! Big Hugggs.