Deborah Burch Poet Monorhyme

Huck's River

Huck's River

Down on the river we slow movin'
Driftin' along without reprovin'
From any one or their behoovin'
Livin' life free from all disprovin'

But there's a price for this free-livin'
Without no rules some be misgivin'
Takin' what's yours with no thanks givin'
Driftin' along can be quite sievin'

With freedom responsibility
Comes or this life breeds futility 
Raftin' the river's docility 
Can lead to rapid hostility...

deborah burch©12.18.16
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Robert Lindley December 27, 2016 at 2:55 PM Love this finely crafted piece. As well as the country style slang words you used to rhyme! I have several poems using much the same words myself... A7 THANKS FOR THE NOTIFICATION OF THE TYPO IN MY POEM PRESENTED TODAY.. Deborah Burch December 27, 2016 at 3:33 PM Lol! thank you Robert!! You're so kind. And you're very welcome!! That's why we're soup right? To help each other? It's my take on it!! ;) big hugs

Andrea Dietrich December 23, 2016 at 6:15 PM I like how you did it country style. Makes you think of the days of Tom and Huckleberry Fin!! Nicely done, Deborah. Deborah Burch December 23, 2016 at 8:25 PM Thank you! Andy!!!:) Big Hugggs!! Deb

Doug Vinson December 19, 2016 at 9:11 PM Ha! Love it, Deb. Told my math teacher I lost my homework in the river, and she (rightly) rolled her eyes at me in scorn. Oh well, the answer for this poem is still the square root of 49. I'm also reminded that, "With Mogwai comes much responsibility." Doug Vinson December 21, 2016 at 3:01 PM : ) Deb you are so aware of many good things. Deborah Burch December 20, 2016 at 9:27 AM Lol!! Absolutely Doug!! No eating after midnight!!!!:p And no water! Thank you!! Big Hugggs.

Tim Smith December 19, 2016 at 9:56 AM I had the opportunity of that life for a few weeks a couple years back...It is truly enjoyable Deborah Burch December 19, 2016 at 10:09 AM Indeed Tim!! Freedom! Kinda like 'Huck Finn', lol. Thanks for your kind visit! Big Hugggs. Deb

Lim'Rik Flats December 19, 2016 at 8:37 AM I B groovin' on this'n;-) ~j Deborah Burch December 19, 2016 at 9:53 AM Lol! Thanks ~j!! Let's pull out the guitars and slap a few bars o blues! ;)

Joanna Daniel December 19, 2016 at 6:23 AM A beautiful poem portraying life itself:) awesome, Deborah:) Deborah Burch December 19, 2016 at 9:51 AM Thank you Jo!! Very Much! Big Hugggs. Deb

Connie Marcum Wong December 19, 2016 at 3:41 AM A fine entry Deb. Best of luck in the contest! ; ) 7 Deborah Burch December 19, 2016 at 9:51 AM Thank you so much Connie!! Big Hugggs. Deb