Hubbys Folly

We are off on a long DRIVE to see the famous, re-known big FIVE,
Three hours later at the Kruger National Park we safely arrive,
And cruise among predatory country, beautiful, colorful wildlife,
Full of LIFE the two of us, my husband and his very excited WIFE.

We see a pride of LIONS, and park next to a tour bus of HAWAIIANS,
They seem ecstatic, cameras clicking, among them Uruguayans,
They follow us, as they seem to think we will know where to go,
Continue over a bridge SLOW, see crocodiles drifting with the river FLOW.

Still the tour BUS continues and winds its way whenever they see US,
We see cheetah, leopards, a herd of elephants, an absolute plus,
We stop, the tour bus stops too, at a waterhole, but leave, close by are bees,
We spot rhinos, baboons, eagles perched on TREES, a warthog on its KNEES!

The tourist’s excitement contagious and SPILLS, we come across horn BILLS,
Big birds, the secretary bird, Goliath herons, but the horn bills by the hills,
Excite them the most, we had befriended each other and my husband said,
These birds don't FLY, upon which they flew off towards the SKY, hubby so red!

POETRY CONTEST ENTRY
IN RHYMES SUBLIME POETRY CONTEST ENTRY
SPONSORED BY; JOSEPH MAY
05/11/2020
Copyright © | Year Posted 2020

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Dome Avatar
December 6, 2020 at 11:21 AM
Haha. This is wonderful. You are so gifted and so funny.I hope you won. Really enjoy your poetry. Well done. such great visuals. stay safe. Pete.
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November 21, 2020 at 1:27 PM
Nice writing Jenny once again, it's quite a tale you tell here as it's one with great penmanship and fine expression. I never saw the big 5 when in SA though was at a safari park near George but still an amazing experience. hugs and blessings, Gordon
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November 16, 2020 at 11:26 AM
Your hubby will think twice before telling you another bird can't fly! Really enjoyed the "safari" you took us on, Jennifer. I felt like I was riding the bus with you. Excellent writing with creative rhymes! Best wishes in the contest, Hon. Hugs, Carolyn
Proxenos Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 1:04 AM
Hi Carolyn thank you for a wonderful comment my friend. I think I have to also think twice about reading the rules and regulation of contests better. I entered two and misread both contest rules. I am so involved in our business and that unfortunately or fortunately is our livelihood so I spend more time on that since we are working at home and it has proved to be more successful than being in an office with 4 ladies working for us. We had to let three go and we kept our best - also working from her home. God bless, Love Jennifer.
Krutsinger Avatar
November 15, 2020 at 12:26 AM
I do not have to come to South Africa now, as I feel I have already been there and seen all of the best sights.
Lamoureux Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 7:51 AM
What an adventure, wow!
Allison Avatar
November 9, 2020 at 12:52 PM
what a wonderful story told in sublime rhyme I adore the rhyming of lions and Hawaiians!:-) hugs jan xx
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November 8, 2020 at 7:50 PM
Jennifer, I was saddened to see my comment from yesterday disappeared! I agree with all below who loved your rhymes of lion/Hawaiian/Uruguayan, but really, ALL of them! A great tale told in your inimitable style, with the many animals, the tour bus following you, and your hubby turning red because the birds actually do fly! Charming from start to finish. I was wondering if you ever spotted Charlize Theron (rhymes with heron, haha!) A fave! Hugs ~ John
Allison Avatar
November 9, 2020 at 12:53 PM
John its been happening to me too there are poems I KNOW i've commented on yet my words have disappeared it is quite bizarre:-( I made one on a recent POTD and that vanished:-( hugs jan xx
Proxenos Avatar
November 9, 2020 at 2:55 AM
My dear friend, this really upsets me, how did it disappear, i would never delete it unless it was an accident on my part. Funny Christopher also mentioned Charlize Theron saying she is not the only best surprise that came from Benoni in South Africa. Thank you for a great comment as always John, but I would like to find out how your comment disappeared. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer
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November 8, 2020 at 5:18 PM
Ah, lol, this reminds me of the time my hubby was knocking on water melons, someone thought him an exert and asked can you pick me one and he did, lol, , guess you both looked in your element, very nicely written gl in the contest dear Jennifer in answer to your question I don't do yoga, but I do teach meditation classes. It helps with the stress.
Proxenos Avatar
November 9, 2020 at 3:05 AM
Hi Pixie, there are always funny incidents that happen in every family and if we all wrote about them they would make a nice book that people could read and have a laugh at like your hubby and the watermelon and my hubby and birds that don't fly that do! We do meditation at yoga but i'm hopeless, i just get the giggles I can't seem to get it righst. An I so want to not be stressed. Hug and blessings my friend and thank you for an awesome comment! Jennifer Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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November 8, 2020 at 12:36 PM
Ahh!! Reads like an exciting time out on safari. I believe a good contender for the contest. Thanks for the visits to my page. Sara
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November 8, 2020 at 11:46 AM
Hello Jennifer, I agree with what you said in the poem Poet's Peace. Birds that don't fly fly into the sky! Wow! Enjoy your day my friend. hugs.
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November 8, 2020 at 10:41 AM
Wonderfully sublime! I’ve seen crocodiles drifting with the river FLOW.
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November 8, 2020 at 8:51 AM
What a wonderful time you must have had, both you and your hubby, in spite of the faux pas turning his face red o’er what he’d said... loved the poem ~ Belle
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November 8, 2020 at 7:58 AM
Sounds like you two had an exciting day, the rhymes all work together so smoothly, and I love the ending where those birds flew off after he said they couldn't :) Wonderful entry for the contest, Jennifer!
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November 8, 2020 at 10:28 AM
Happy Birthday Michelle. May you be blessed always, love, Jennifer.
Wolf Avatar
November 6, 2020 at 11:04 AM
'Hawaiians and Uruguayans!' By the authority no one would ever invest in me, I hereby nominate you for ROTW! (Rhyme of the Week). Superb penning, Jennifer. Happy Weekend, Gershon
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November 6, 2020 at 9:20 AM
You rhyme into my heart.. the sight of your well composed words a music to the eyes and a harmonious dance to the soul.. as thrilled by such an adventure offered by a so wonderful poetess, a free spirit responding to the joys of Life to the pulses of Love and to a great talent of inspiring poetry! So wonderful is your poetic rhyming tour, dear soul sister Jenny! So pleased to read! A win! Best regards and warmest wishes. Love and hugs.
Ashley Avatar
November 5, 2020 at 8:57 PM
Jennifer, I love the adventurous spirit of your fun and fantastic poem and your creative use of awesome rhymes like "LIONS/HAWAIIANS" - how ingenious! I love how the trip unfolds to a grand finale with a great last line! Your wonderful heart and pen makes me smile, my dear friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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November 5, 2020 at 6:31 PM
The Kruger is on my bucket list, with the pandemic going on it won't be anytime soon. Enjoyed your verse Jennifer and good luck in the contest. Tom
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November 5, 2020 at 3:32 PM
so cute this was. I just love that rhyme you did with Hawaiians and lions, Jennifer.
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November 5, 2020 at 2:20 PM
Hello Jennifer … oh yes, we can get caught out by nature doing the unpredictable. You are so lucky to be able to watch and learn from the wildlife in South Africa - Hubby’s red face wasn’t from sun burn then Jennifer - Lindsay
One Avatar
November 5, 2020 at 12:05 PM
This was fun and made me smile! Think I'm going to pay a visit to South Africa, will you be my guide?
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November 5, 2020 at 10:42 AM
- We have many herons here ... I googled them to tell you which one ...but there were so many different ones ... hard to find the right one ... but, they can fly even if they are very large :) - You describe your day as an adventure, dear sister :) - Best wishes in the contest with this wonderful poem :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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