How Lush--Sf

the soft expanse of a forest
is warmed by breath of sunlight,
twirls of fresh aureoles ripen
into wildly combed trees,
much like gypsy- red daytime
cradling a sense of hometown innocence
if only to remember one's beginnings..

softly, i lay among a hammock of buds
etched on aisles of moist stones and rocks
and in the wisp of morning's sigh,
i turn into a garment of foliage
not knowing how the wind
can scatter my breath into grains;
to amble in a dance ...till i fall

headlong into the lush of content.



Succintly Free ( SF) Contest, Andrea Dietrich
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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November 18, 2013 at 6:59 PM
Nette, Awesome free verse... xox~ Linda,
May Avatar
November 18, 2013 at 12:39 PM
great write and win Nette....congrats
Sirak Avatar
November 18, 2013 at 7:51 AM
Oh you definitely deserve to be on top with this gem! Beautiful imaginative and breathtaking. Congrats
Puddifoot Avatar
November 18, 2013 at 6:49 AM
I read this before and commented on it, and it went straight to the top, just as I thought it would! congrats on your top spot win! :)
Adams Avatar
November 17, 2013 at 8:14 PM
when i read this i knew i would find it in the winner's list...gorgeous poem, congrats on your win :)
Lamoureux Avatar
November 17, 2013 at 7:49 PM
You never cease to amaze, congratulations.
Dietrich Avatar
November 17, 2013 at 6:00 PM
Nette, everything charlotte said below here is right. I did not understand why you said lush of content. But everything else was so stunningly beautiful, I had to give it first place. Just gorgeous.
Puddifoot Avatar
November 12, 2013 at 5:37 PM
I echo all that has been said below - ethereal and stunning, love that scattering of breath into grains! good luck in the contest (but I don't think you'll need it, should be right up andrea's boulevard!) :)
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November 11, 2013 at 7:45 AM
You sure know how to paint a very vivid picture. This is a stunning verse. I enjoyed every bit. It was sweet and succulent throughout. Love the last line--says it all. Oh how I miss the lush in this city I live in! Its nice to read about what I really love... Always, Laura
Trifiatis Avatar
November 11, 2013 at 4:32 AM
Enrapture of screaming beauty!
Carrillo Avatar
November 10, 2013 at 8:02 PM
A wonderful poem. you painted a beautiful picture here. Thanks.... Lucilla
Seal Avatar
November 10, 2013 at 7:38 PM
Who could not be content in this wonderful creation, beautiful write Nette. Take care, Richard
Adams Avatar
November 10, 2013 at 6:04 PM
breathtakingly beautiful piece...sounds like a paradise that you have penned here....enjoyed this one today :) ...hope you made out well with the typhoon...hugs!
Carroll Avatar
November 10, 2013 at 3:17 PM
Hi Nette, A most lovely write from you... Ken
Horne Avatar
November 10, 2013 at 1:19 PM
awesome write, Nette - hope you are safe with the storms. Thanks very much, great contest
Anglesey Avatar
November 10, 2013 at 12:06 PM
nette, breathtaking as always. Prayers to your continued safety through the aftermath of the storms.
Devnath  Avatar
November 10, 2013 at 8:40 AM
Beautiful scene of forest adorned with sweet colors of sweet imagination. Loved always, bl
Tacito Avatar
November 10, 2013 at 8:26 AM
DEEP SIGHS!!! So many man-goosebumps! Yes! Cherish the simple breaths, the simple pleasures...
Sathasivam Avatar
November 10, 2013 at 6:49 AM
Excellent. Well penned. Enjoyed. Tfs
Andresen Avatar
November 10, 2013 at 6:45 AM
- Like beautiful music to my ears :) - Have a nice Sunday, Nette. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
Jones Avatar
November 10, 2013 at 6:09 AM
Your poem sounds like describing the garden of eden ...so wonderful..I would love to be here feel this....
Sharma Avatar
November 10, 2013 at 2:40 AM
So beautiful. "Hi, actually I just wanted to know if my poem " Lost" that I had entered in your contest" Senses for sestest" is in iambic pentameter or not?. I am really keen on learning poetic forms, and trying to learn myself through various websites. But please kindly guide me on this aspect. Thanks:)
Conte Avatar
November 9, 2013 at 11:19 PM
A garment of foliage-- this is the centerpiece signed with contentment at the end line.True mark of a deep artist.I'm glad I took the risk of entering your contest, thank you kindly, Nette!
Sivey Avatar
November 9, 2013 at 10:32 PM
It surely is lush, your write is truly a lush environment of pure delight my friend! I really enjoyed reading this tremendous poem this evening! You have portrayed a daytime full of content and amazement! What a spectacular piece, what a magnificent poem, Great Work!!
Wilson Avatar
November 9, 2013 at 9:38 PM
very beautiful and descriptive of such a lush environment...good one Nette! love, Deb
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