Debbie Guzzi Poet Senryu

Hot Mixtures

a candle’s flame moves
in the breeze from the window –
her gaze lowers

the sizzling dish
is presented, white chicken –
salsa, red and green

a margarita
wide mouthed, salted and chilled –
her laughter rises

silverware moonlit
stands out against the red cloth –
a knife is dropped 

Mexican coffee
arrives a two tone mixture –
too hot to handle

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Matthew Horstkotter June 7, 2013 at 7:47 PM Nice poem.

Poet Destroyer A June 7, 2013 at 4:07 PM nice lovely and hot. *Thank you Debbie, for the suggestion... I changed my wannabe haiku, to the senryu form. makes better sense. xox~ Linda

Connie Gildersleeve May 27, 2013 at 7:18 AM Debbie you've captured extremely well the sensory language in this senryu. A exceptional write. Warm Smiles, Connie

Michael Ainsley May 25, 2013 at 7:43 AM Took me back to memories of my own.Thank you Debbie

John Posey May 24, 2013 at 7:13 PM My mouth is watering and my hormones are active... Good Job, but somehow I don't think that was your intention.... Hugs to ya... Jake

Sara Kendrick May 24, 2013 at 7:01 AM Great descriptive work..Enjoyed reading this one even though it was almost too hot to handle..Sara

James Marshall Goff May 21, 2013 at 10:55 PM Very creatively written....i took yer advice....soup mail

Bl Devnath May 21, 2013 at 2:23 PM Very sweet romantic poem. You have created a nice image. Loved always, bl

Carrie Richards May 18, 2013 at 2:29 PM mmmmmm......I wanna be her ! (maybe a little Andres' Segovia guitar music playing in the background?)

Kash Poet May 18, 2013 at 11:00 AM Romantic indeed!The title of your contest is "When the Going Get's Touch, the Tough Get Going " OR " When the going gets TOUGH, the tough gets going "?

Andrea Dietrich May 17, 2013 at 9:38 AM ooh la la. Very spicy. Love these, Debs. For me the one most haiku is the first one. that one is magnificent.

Eileen Manassian May 15, 2013 at 1:57 PM Debbie, dear...you reign supreme! LOVELY! I enjoyed it every so much...and I'm trying to be a good student, so I did observe closely! Hugs!