Horror In Hawaii

Wrote this for Carolyn's Vacation Humor contest, but I went a little overboard
with the amount of lines.  


It was such a big elation
Finally getting my vacation
Two weeks off with lots of plans
That were supposed to be be so grand
A second honeymoon to take
A welcome and inviting break
Memories to fill our hearts
Happiness right from the start
Turning into fun and laughter
We could carry ever after
Swimming in waters so blue
Hawaiian Island grand and true
Leis placed gently on your neck
Being greeted with respect
A pig luau smelling good
Like a yummy supper should
As your lying in the sand
Fruity drinks place in your hand
A perfect dream this should be
Instead nightmare reality
Faces us up ahead
A horror and awful dread
No blue waters for our swimming
Just a pool that needs some skimming
No Hawaii in our sights
Just a scary place at night
No pretty leis or hello greeting
Just frightful people we are meeting
Our pig luau turned into crud
Our meals all tasted like mud
No sand or delicious drinks
Hard floors and water from the sink
Our vacation turned from memories
And pictures for our friends to see
To a hell that always burns
When a drunk pilot took a turn
Landing us so far off course
It couldn't get any worse
Stepping off the plane and crying
We were brought to Rikers Island

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 5/23/2015 11:23:00 AM
EPIC POEM
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Date: 7/12/2014 8:54:00 AM
Sad and funny at the same time..Reads like a winner to me..Way to go for the contest...Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Date: 7/12/2014 2:39:00 AM
LOL Robin - needs a reformat my friend... it's still not fixed! good luck in the contest Hugs jan xxx
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