Hopelessly Devoted

For Trudy Diane Rider's competition entitled  "Hopelessly devoted" (what is your passion)  
rhyming required ababbcc:





My mind is racing as I vacate my bed
I need to grab my lap top fast as hell
What rhymes with bed? - it could be red or dead
What rhymes with hell? - perhaps a tolling bell
As my poem emerges, hope it all will gel
I wake each day with rhythm and beat, it's great
To pen it all and see it in print, can't wait.

Buzzing with feelings and words not yet agreed
Muttering syllables,  throughout the alphabet
Beating out time and meter at a high speed
When in the soup, will take any help I can get
As beautiful words can change one's whole mindset
I wake each day with rhythm and beat, it's great
To pen it all and see it in the print, can't wait.

Ballads and sonnetts, epics, Haiku's and more
Works by Keats I'll read and then I'll expand
Writing odes to doves and sea birds now ashore
In my native town, midst the sun, sea and the sand
Then I'll dream of Heaney and Joyce and Yeats - And
I'll wake each day with rhythm and beat, it's great
To pen it all and see it in print, can't wait.

It's such a buzz to finally get it out
Inking that picture captured by me alone
Reading it over there sure will be some doubt
Though magic in words that only I can own
Original, seeds that I have newly sewn
I'll wake each day with rhythm and beat, it's great
To pen it  all and see it in print, can't wait.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Mason Avatar
September 7, 2009 at 3:18 PM
Awesome writing here, Deirdre and congratulations on your win ... pseudo-school teacher that I am ... LOL ... I want to point out that there is a typo in the third to the last line with the word which I think is supposed to be Original ....
Strand Avatar
September 2, 2009 at 12:28 AM
Best wishes with this one Deirdre.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
Augustus Avatar
September 1, 2009 at 1:41 PM
Totally get your poem and completely think the same way every time I write! It's like you wrote stanzas 1, 2, and 4 just for me. Congratulations for placing in Trudy's contest. Truly deserving.
Rider Avatar
September 1, 2009 at 11:54 AM
Deirdre, if you look at the blue links on the left side of this page you will see where is says Member Contest Winners...click on that link and scroll down the contest name Hoplessly Devoted,..they are listed in alphabetical order. Again, congratulations. ~Trudy~
Kelly Avatar
September 1, 2009 at 9:00 AM
Well done Deirdre , with this well penned , well rhymed piece ....
Richards Avatar
September 1, 2009 at 8:07 AM
I love this orginal entry, Deirdre....it made me smile..as poets, we can all identify with your passion so cleverly expressed in this winning poem!! ~Congratulations! ~ Love, Carrie
Brown Avatar
September 1, 2009 at 3:25 AM
Congratulations Deirdre on your win in Trudy's contest. Love, Carol
Strand Avatar
September 1, 2009 at 2:08 AM
Congrats of your success in Trudy's contest Deirdre.Rgds Brian
Moreno Avatar
August 31, 2009 at 11:20 PM
Deirdre, congratulations on your success in Trudy's contest...Raul
Rider Avatar
August 31, 2009 at 9:52 PM
Congratulations in placing in my contest Deirdre! ~Trudy~
Strand Avatar
August 31, 2009 at 12:21 AM
Best wishes with this one Deirdre.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments today.
Kelly Avatar
August 30, 2009 at 10:59 AM
Great presentation , Deirde , in perfect rhyme and best of luck in the contest ...
Kendrick Avatar
August 30, 2009 at 4:44 AM
Another person not sleeping because ideas running through head. Keep writing. Sara
Brown Avatar
August 29, 2009 at 9:17 PM
Great write!
Brown Avatar
August 28, 2009 at 4:34 PM
I enjoyed reading your splendid poetry today Deirdre. Thank you for sharing.Wishing you the best in the contest. Love, Carol
Richards Avatar
August 28, 2009 at 3:50 PM
I too, am devoted to the Soup....it is such a joy and pleasure....and I'll admit a bit of an addiction.....checking in so often to see what I've missed and adding my 2 cents worth!! Great job here!! :) Carrie
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