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Hopelessly Devoted

For Trudy Diane Rider's competition entitled "Hopelessly devoted" (what is your passion) rhyming required ababbcc: My mind is racing as I vacate my bed I need to grab my lap top fast as hell What rhymes with bed? - it could be red or dead What rhymes with hell? - perhaps a tolling bell As my poem emerges, hope it all will gel I wake each day with rhythm and beat, it's great To pen it all and see it in print, can't wait. Buzzing with feelings and words not yet agreed Muttering syllables, throughout the alphabet Beating out time and meter at a high speed When in the soup, will take any help I can get As beautiful words can change one's whole mindset I wake each day with rhythm and beat, it's great To pen it all and see it in the print, can't wait. Ballads and sonnetts, epics, Haiku's and more Works by Keats I'll read and then I'll expand Writing odes to doves and sea birds now ashore In my native town, midst the sun, sea and the sand Then I'll dream of Heaney and Joyce and Yeats - And I'll wake each day with rhythm and beat, it's great To pen it all and see it in print, can't wait. It's such a buzz to finally get it out Inking that picture captured by me alone Reading it over there sure will be some doubt Though magic in words that only I can own Original, seeds that I have newly sewn I'll wake each day with rhythm and beat, it's great To pen it all and see it in print, can't wait.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 9/7/2009 3:18:00 PM
Awesome writing here, Deirdre and congratulations on your win ... pseudo-school teacher that I am ... LOL ... I want to point out that there is a typo in the third to the last line with the word which I think is supposed to be Original ....
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Date: 9/2/2009 12:28:00 AM
Best wishes with this one Deirdre.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
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Date: 9/1/2009 1:41:00 PM
Totally get your poem and completely think the same way every time I write! It's like you wrote stanzas 1, 2, and 4 just for me. Congratulations for placing in Trudy's contest. Truly deserving.
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Date: 9/1/2009 11:54:00 AM
Deirdre, if you look at the blue links on the left side of this page you will see where is says Member Contest Winners...click on that link and scroll down the contest name Hoplessly Devoted,..they are listed in alphabetical order. Again, congratulations. ~Trudy~
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Date: 9/1/2009 9:00:00 AM
Well done Deirdre , with this well penned , well rhymed piece ....
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Date: 9/1/2009 8:07:00 AM
I love this orginal entry, Deirdre....it made me smile..as poets, we can all identify with your passion so cleverly expressed in this winning poem!! ~Congratulations! ~ Love, Carrie
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Date: 9/1/2009 3:25:00 AM
Congratulations Deirdre on your win in Trudy's contest. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/1/2009 2:08:00 AM
Congrats of your success in Trudy's contest Deirdre.Rgds Brian
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Date: 8/31/2009 11:20:00 PM
Deirdre, congratulations on your success in Trudy's contest...Raul
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Date: 8/31/2009 9:52:00 PM
Congratulations in placing in my contest Deirdre! ~Trudy~
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Date: 8/31/2009 12:21:00 AM
Best wishes with this one Deirdre.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments today.
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Date: 8/30/2009 10:59:00 AM
Great presentation , Deirde , in perfect rhyme and best of luck in the contest ...
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Date: 8/30/2009 4:44:00 AM
Another person not sleeping because ideas running through head. Keep writing. Sara
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Date: 8/29/2009 9:17:00 PM
Great write!
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Date: 8/28/2009 4:34:00 PM
I enjoyed reading your splendid poetry today Deirdre. Thank you for sharing.Wishing you the best in the contest. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/28/2009 3:50:00 PM
I too, am devoted to the Soup....it is such a joy and pleasure....and I'll admit a bit of an addiction.....checking in so often to see what I've missed and adding my 2 cents worth!! Great job here!! :) Carrie
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