Daver Austin Poet Tanka

Hopeful Trio

HOPEFUL TRIO

the first hint of spring
cannot be put into words
no special color
it is the song of the wind
softly breezing warmth and hope

hint
of spring
gentle breeze
come from somewhere
stings but warms your cheek
the northern god is tired
labored very hard this year
there is no pity in his voice
sister sun has weakened him with age
he coughs and sputters round the neighborhood

the first hint of spring
subtle change of attitude
breeze instead of wind

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Michelle Mac Donald May 2, 2011 at 3:13 PM A charming write, Daver! A "Hopeful Trio", for sure. Taciturn winter, "coughs and sputters", he is no match for Spring's warmth and sunlight... the third is the winsome breeze? I'm in hopeful anticipation of the flowers...I keep seeing starving bumblebees.:( They are so lethargic, Daver. Best to you and yours! Love, Mikki

Carolyn Devonshire February 27, 2011 at 8:52 AM Hallelujah! The sun sister prevailed over the northern god. Love the idea of him coughing and sputtering out the last few snowflakes that had been clogging his windpipe. This looks like an entry for Constance's contest, but I know you don't do contests so I'll just put it in my faves. I am out of town until Wednesday, but wanted to say hi. I'm okay. Perpetrator got fired! Love you and your poetry, Carolyn

James Peranteau February 27, 2011 at 7:24 AM W are inching towards spring dear poet, thanks for the introduction, I'm tired of this winter ! Much love, james

Gert W. Knop February 27, 2011 at 6:22 AM What a nice piece of poetry, Dave! Now we are all waiting for spring after a long winter, can feel the breeze already!...Love, Gert

Andrea Dietrich February 27, 2011 at 12:45 AM oh, how nice this is all together. I especially liked "breeze instead of wind" a subtle hint of the change!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart February 26, 2011 at 6:36 PM Lovely and wonderful write Dave and perfect for the contest ..good luck my friend.. enjoyed every line anticipating Spring when I look out my Winter window luv..these lines give me hope ..thankxx my friend..with luv..

Dr.Ram Mehta February 26, 2011 at 2:14 PM beautiful worded and structure the three forms on the continuous theme of spring, daver

Wilma Neels February 26, 2011 at 9:13 AM Quite an interesting trio Dave, tell me why you chose the title hopeful? Love your sister sun line.. Hope your weekend's a good one ;-)