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HOME SWEET HOME love the scent of petrichor in the deep dark woods. draws those little beggars tattered with ashes and soot. i’ve sweetened the siding, the windows and doors, deliciously painted invitation of rainbows, placed hooks with eye-popping candy, hallucinations with looks. they will not be able to resist this kindly sweet cook. Yes! Yes! Here they come! Right on time! Right from the book! I must be careful, diligent this time! They must not get spooked. The water is boiling…check! I’m just ready to drop in the food. My tummy is grumbling. must be careful to not show a bad mood. That boy! Especially that boy…he is older. Could be a right snoop. They must be quite tired, ready to be cooped up in my quaint cottage, restrained, take a bath with cool boiling suds. Must be careful of my hands, show no blood by rubbing them raw as I greedily lick my tongue. “Oh poor innocent children. Come! Come! Let me book you in my humble home…find you a room. Oh dear girl and dear boy. Let me groom the hair from your eyes.” I err and lift a spoon, gaze with longing at these tender potatoes. Forsook, as the ashen boy grabs his sister's hand and runs. Phooey! Now I’ve only to chop off my finger. I’m doomed! 7/14/2021 Light verse *inspired by the fairytale Hansel and Gretel

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Date: 7/18/2021 5:52:00 PM
This fits in so well with the original Grimms Faerie Tales Kim!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/18/2021 8:25:00 PM
Thank you, Caren!
Date: 7/15/2021 6:07:00 PM
Wow! This is a whale of a tale, Kim. Enjoyed every last line, right down to the bone (of the witch's finger)! Thanks! :) gw
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/15/2021 7:25:00 PM
LOL! Thank you :)
Date: 7/15/2021 12:53:00 PM
- The fairy tale in a great new version ... my daughter loved the original ... I have probably read it 1000 times ... great written, Kim ... very creative :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/15/2021 1:48:00 PM
Thank you, Anne-Lise!
Date: 7/15/2021 10:24:00 AM
Delightful version of original. Thoroughly enjoyed reading. Thanks
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/15/2021 12:05:00 PM
Thanks, Rama!
Date: 7/15/2021 7:50:00 AM
Great inspiration, Kim. I have forgotten the nursery rhymes. Hugs dear friend.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/15/2021 12:05:00 PM
The things I grew up reading! Thanks :)
Date: 7/15/2021 4:52:00 AM
Enjoyed your version Kim, you were well inspired by that fairy tale. Tom
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/15/2021 12:06:00 PM
Thank you, Tom!

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