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Holy Child

on to you a savior was born this night
the shepherds heard the angels come to say
this star so bright will be your guiding light
go see the king atop the manger's hay

the shepherds heard the angels come to say
swaddled in cloth of ivory he lays
go see the king atop the manger's hay
follow the light to go offer your praise

swaddled in cloth of ivory he lays
journey to the manger over the steeps
follow the light to go offer your praise
it is there the holy child softly sleeps

journey to the manger over the steeps
this star so bright will be your guiding light
it is there this holy child softly sleeps
on to you a savior was born this night

january 18, 2020
Christmas Pantoum contest
Sponsored by Eve Roper
Photo #1

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Chris Green Date: 1/27/2020 8:08:00 AM Congrats on your win with this beautiful and expressive poem enhanced in only a way your talent can do. So deserving of the top spot. Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 1/27/2020 10:15:00 AM wow... what a kind thing to say... thank you so much Chris :) hugs

Wendy Watson Date: 1/26/2020 3:29:00 AM I really enjoyed reading this beautifully composed poem which flowed so well, Sandra. Did you mean 'unto' him though? Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 1/26/2020 4:06:00 AM Thank you Wendy. I meant it as worded in the poem :) hugs

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 1/26/2020 1:06:00 AM Sandra, I am so happy to see this win first place. Congratulations my friend! Time well spent! xxoo Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 1/26/2020 4:07:00 AM Thank you so much Connie :). Hugs XoXo

Eve Roper Date: 1/25/2020 8:26:00 PM Congratulations on your very well-deserved win, Sandra. I want to thank you for entering my contest. The birthday of Jesus is my favorite time to remind me of why I am blessed. Your poem had great flow, perfect rhyme, and imagery. Hugs Eve Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 1/25/2020 8:41:00 PM First let me say Happy Birthday again... then let me thank for for hosting this contest and for your pantoum lesson on your page that allowed me to step outside my comfort zone and attempt another one....to me Christmas is about Christ, so i set my sights on photo one...i am elated with the high placement...i struggle with rhyme, rhythm and forms but am attempting more and more of them... hugs and blessings

Chris Green Date: 1/20/2020 7:47:00 AM This was beautiful Sandy. Your talent to write in any form leaves me constantly in awe. You are amazing. Best wishes in the contest. Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 1/20/2020 8:08:00 AM Thank you so much Chris... this is one of the hardest forms for me to write... probably because of the strict structure and rules...i sometimes like to challenge myself though i almost threw the towel in with it... hugs

Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/19/2020 5:36:00 PM This is a slice of perfect. I can almost hear the Angels singing your poem Sandra. Hugs Rick. Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 1/19/2020 7:15:00 PM Thank you so much Rick ... :) hugs

Caren Krutsinger Date: 1/19/2020 4:36:00 PM Gorgeous Pantoum; they are difficult, but you have made this one prance along nicely in the spirit of Christmas. Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 1/19/2020 5:16:00 PM Thank you so much Caren... definitely difficult...but i was up for the challenge :) hugs

Arturo Michael Date: 1/19/2020 3:58:00 PM On to you a Savior is born in every breath you take....Nice write... Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 1/19/2020 5:16:00 PM Thank you so much Arturo...it was not an easy write for me :) hugs

Running Wolves Date: 1/19/2020 10:02:00 AM this is awesomely wonderful. a most beautiful tribute to Jesus, to God, and to Mary... this is a fav Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 1/19/2020 11:23:00 AM Thank you so much Robert...i am honored that you faved this one and by your kind words... rhyme is hard for me... add the constraints of the form and the syllable counts ...it took me days to complete this one... hugs

Vijay Pandit Date: 1/19/2020 7:15:00 AM Your words paint the photo and tell the holy story-- depicting the scene beautifully. All the best, Sandy. Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 1/19/2020 11:21:00 AM Thank you Vijay... this was a tough one for me to write... rhyme, syllable counts and the constraints of the form... hugs

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 1/19/2020 5:22:00 AM Magnificently done! A poem that uplifts the soul onto the planes of ecstasy dear, Sandra! Hugs xxx Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 1/19/2020 11:19:00 AM Thank you so much Demetrios...i struggled with the constraints of this form .... hugs XoXo

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 1/18/2020 10:43:00 PM Beautiful Sandra! This form is so difficult that I have never been able to complete one I was satisfied with. Bravo! xxoo Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 1/18/2020 11:18:00 PM Thank you and i agree, they are a very difficult form...Eve's how to write a pantoum she posted dec 1st helps some but i still struggled with it...i have been trying to write this all week...still not sure if i am 100% happy with it...but it will stand as is... hugs XoXo