Hippodrome

She bit the inside of her cheek She would not cry there would be no weakness in her expression Her breath slowed She possessed a scary calmness that no one could understand No one would ever understand Each word spoken was slow and deliberate Each beat of her heart made sense Fear had no attachment to her No bond on her soul She looked upon the gallery they seemed as fans of the recent act any excuse to gather to compare Their discussions too animated nods of their heads too quick It sickened her She went home

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Carrie Richards

Date: 3/30/2009 7:12:00 AM

Soup mail....for Ms. Ginn AGAIN....hey I rhymed...how clever of me!!

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/20/2009 1:02:00 PM

How well you express the inner thoughts of one who hides their emotions, Laurie. And yet, as a writer, your emotions speak loud and clear. There is quite a wise observation in the last four lines. Truly a great poem!

Frank F. Atanacio

Date: 3/17/2009 5:19:00 AM

carefully chosen words-- very well written Shoe-shine

Colin Mitchell Williams

Date: 3/16/2009 1:19:00 PM

Sycophantic sycophants..... :) LOL

Raul Moreno

Date: 3/16/2009 1:07:00 AM

Excellent work Laurie, "Each word spoken was slow and deliberate Each beat of her heart made sense" nice stanza...Raul

Carrie Richards

Date: 3/14/2009 7:36:00 PM

Wow...I've been gone most of the day, then to return and find you have been busy with this heavy-duty poem..wow! This scene has all kinds of unpleasant possibilities...makes me want to pick your brain...I've been in certain situations that makes me think...was it this, or that, that was something she couldn't tolerate? You've stirred our minds with this one, Laurie! (ps...Chris is still hot and bothered!! )

John Rhinem

Date: 3/14/2009 4:47:00 PM

....I have come to sincerely love and admire these wonderful revelations of Yourself, which I have bit by bit, been so fortunate to have come to know...."You Are A Lady of Many Treasures" I believe!!!!~ Smile~And I am grateful to have made "Your" acquantance!!!!~"Wonderful Write Here Laurie~Straight From The Heart & Soul!!!!"~"My Love As Always, To 'You & Your Loves,' John!!!"~"Have A Beautiful Evening Dear Lady!!!:):)

John Rhinem

Date: 3/14/2009 4:36:00 PM

Smile?~"Hello Again Dear Talented & Beautiful Laurie Ginn!!!"~I believe that my breath moved slowly with Yours here as I read this profoundly deep write of Yours!!!~Life can sometimes seem to be as such; can it not!? And yet, I see and find Your strength within these wonderful words of Yours here~so sure, strong and dignified~as a glimpse upon the admirable qualities of character in which "You Hold!!!!"....cont....

Christopher Higgins

Date: 3/14/2009 4:08:00 PM

Another cool write from you.. I am still thinking about losing the top thing though..where do I pay for admission?

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 3/14/2009 1:46:00 PM

This chick sounds either really cool, or totally lost. I get her, though, awesome, sharp poem, L, love, K