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dark bruises round her eyes masked by make up domestic abuse her inner pain she hides well her face bright August Ninette Poetry Contest sponsored by Caren Krutsinger 8/11/19

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Date: 8/22/2019 2:22:00 PM
Powerful. Congrats on your win, Jan.
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Date: 8/20/2019 4:03:00 PM
so sad, sometimes it is for the best - to hide for awhile to see what God can do. Congrats on your placement.
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Date: 8/16/2019 11:18:00 AM
wow deep, great ninette lovely Jan, reads like a winner to me. Especially with this serious topic. Good luck! :)-luloo
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 8/17/2019 2:49:00 AM
Thanks LuLoo I seem to be writing dark and deep at the moment. Hope all is good with you and the family:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 8/15/2019 3:40:00 PM
this speaks volumes...i remember those days well...powerful poem!
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 8/17/2019 2:48:00 AM
aww Sandra I am so sorry you can relate on a personal level. I used to work with someone who was abused she had an excuse for every bruise and black eye it was so so sad:-( hugs jan xx
Date: 8/12/2019 9:52:00 PM
Very powerfully penned, Jan. This is a top-drawer ninette, in my opinion at least. Best wishes, gw
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Gershon Wolf
Date: 8/19/2019 9:41:00 PM
Congrats on your win in the contest, though thought this might place a bit higher. Really, it's brilliantly penned. Best wishes, gw
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 8/17/2019 2:47:00 AM
thanks so much GW:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/12/2019 2:06:00 PM
You did very well with this topic, Jan. Alas, domestic abuse seems to be rampant these days, and many victims are unable to find the strength to escape it. In my eyes this is already a winner. Hugs // paul
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 8/12/2019 2:08:00 PM
Thanks so much Paul, and I hope the ladies had a wonderful time in the uk:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/12/2019 3:22:00 AM
That was well done. I can feel the change from dark to bright even though the picture I get is sad. I hate cowards who maltreat women. I was always loving towards my wife. Hugs xx
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 8/12/2019 4:54:00 AM
I know you are the ultimate gentleman Victor!:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/11/2019 7:19:00 PM
Very well done, really like the first and end word contrast. I'm such a tweedle-wink that I literally thought the ninette had to be about August - just realized otherwise reading Andrea's entry. I wonder if I'm the only one who interpreted it that way... A fine composition worthy of a win. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 8/12/2019 2:37:00 AM
lol @tweedle-wink... don't worry CayCay I've seen many write on the 'August' theme:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/11/2019 4:59:00 PM
So sad that this goes on and the victims stay out of some sort of loyalty. Good luck. Tom
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 8/12/2019 2:36:00 AM
I guess they stay out of fear, from what I've read many are made to feel so worthless they cannot escape:-( hugs jan xx
Date: 8/11/2019 4:40:00 PM
The picture your words paint are so vivid and sadly so true Jan. Such a terrible thing to be abused by the person you trusted and loved. Good luck in the contest Jan, with kindest thoughts Ann xx
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 8/12/2019 2:35:00 AM
So true Anne:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/11/2019 2:41:00 PM
Bingo! Betcha this takes the top prize. Brilliantly penned, Jan. Excelsior! :) gw
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 8/12/2019 2:34:00 AM
I hope Caren likes it GW:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/11/2019 2:41:00 PM
Hi Jan, This write packs a powerful punch on the topic of domestic abuse. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 8/12/2019 2:30:00 AM
love your comment Alexis, domestic violence can remain hidden ... none of us really know what happens behind closed doors:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/11/2019 1:59:00 PM
- Many people experience violence and threats in the family ... it makes me sad - Great written, Jan - Best wishes in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 8/12/2019 2:29:00 AM
Thanks Anne-Lise - this was written about a colleague at a day nursery when I was doing my nursery nursing training... her boyfriend was a 'pimp' she often came to work with bruises and had an excuse for how she got the, it has always stuck in my memory:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/11/2019 1:26:00 PM
Jan, a succinct and potent portrayal of the face of abuse. A moving and evocative piece superbly done. Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you, my friend.. ~Susan
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 8/12/2019 2:27:00 AM
I see many have written about 'August' so I am not sure:-) hugs jan xx
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Susan Ashley
Date: 8/11/2019 2:12:00 PM
I'm sure this sad beauty will deeply move Caren's heart and earn you a well deserved place on the winner's list. We should never lose sight of the importance of the message you convey.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 8/11/2019 1:31:00 PM
Thanks Susan I wrote it on Friday when I was sitting in a church car park waiting for my hubby as he was helping a friend, I've already posted one poem today so I wasn't going to post it until tomorrow but the contest only had one space left, its a dark theme but I hope Caren likes it:-)hugs jan xx