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Hidden Mental Side

December 03, 2023 ___________________________________________ Dissipating drowsiness In the elmwood of the mind Eras and realities collide Having body crawl In the gloomiest of night hazy drizzle. Dullness seeps in Across increasing veins As faraway as the sunshine Switches to a slower pace Laughter from a bygone era Cuts and scrapes Leaving me breathless. The resolve is unwavering And sustains the ultimate breath Every day in bitter shadows In pursuit of Eden insight My cornea has been burned.

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Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 12/4/2023 12:52:00 PM

- Anxiety is so painful and it triggers shortness of breath and suffocation…let the sunshine in… a deeply emotional poem, Las - hugs

Sam Kauffman

Date: 12/4/2023 11:59:00 AM

So powerful and so personal, Lasaad! "In pursuit of Eden insight," "bitter shadows," "dissipating drowsiness" - your command of vibrant imagery that expresses your poem is truly wonderful. You have such a command of words and unique word pairings that create any atmosphere you desire to bring me into to revel in your poem! If this is for a contest, best wishes for a win. Blessing, dear friend.

Jay Narain

Date: 12/4/2023 11:01:00 AM

Very evocative and emotional poem. Well penned.

Ink Empress

Date: 12/3/2023 8:27:00 PM

This entire poem is evocative and very soulful, a poem that depicts hidden darkness and how one struggles. I somehow resonated with these lines “Laughter from a bygone era,Cuts and scrapes,Leaving me breathless.” Sometimes when we reminisce and think of happy times whilst drowning, we may end up feeling breathless, good times too can be haunting for an individual struggling in darkness. I absolutely love and felt the depth of this deeply moving write. And your way with phrasing all is impeccable

Paige Hind

Date: 12/3/2023 6:54:00 PM

Heavy, I could relate though. You're fighting veins that open- and close. I enjoyed.

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 12/3/2023 2:02:00 PM

Never get depression. Never admit age. Getting involved is fun. I like the poem

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/3/2023 1:26:00 PM

I sensed desperation with your poetic words, words that focused on the silent suffering of someone dealing with either anxiety or depression. I remember a brief period in my life when I felt that 'deep dullness that seeped into my veins'- a feeling I'd never had before...wasn't quite sure how to handle it at the time. I digress. You've demonstrated how you can evoke such deep feelings within your poetic voice and ability. I salute you, dear Sotto! Have a pleasant day, your poetess friend, Sara

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/3/2023 12:38:00 PM

A powerful write. Sleep/rest well tonight... Have a wonderful day/week writing away..........

Silent One

Date: 12/3/2023 12:30:00 PM

I can feel the angst and anxiety in your words.. sadly so many suffer from this and others do not notice.. ive known people who have suffered in silence all the lives.. its always best to talk to someone about it and seek help.. as always your described it so poetically..

Miranda Hawley

Date: 12/3/2023 10:40:00 AM

Sleep better dude! Lack of sleep is something I had a ton of when I was dealing with deep depression!