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Hesitation

1/10/19 Hesitation Drum, drum, drum, drum, The beating of the hearts, The air dense with uneven breaths, Hesitation. Intimate faces but strangers now What a twist Of chances that we both muster a “hello,” Sinking into buzz lines of music, A sip of Flaming Dr. Pepper, Hesitation. Drum, drum, drum, drum, The hearts knock behind thick Walls, the music, The camouflage for the chill Air, static that can kill a fly In one zap. Hesitation. A chilling war, A gulp of Boiler Maker To erupt any lines, to combust, To blast dynamite through walls, To make them crumble, To die, Hesitation. Nursing the empty cup, The palpitation, the thickness Of the condensing air. A drum of defeat, Hesitation. Leaving you in one piece To nurse the Dark And Stormy. Free verse style only Sponsor: Emile Pinet

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Date: 1/22/2019 9:27:00 AM
I thoroughly enjoyed the feeling of your poem, the hesitation, anticipation and defeat expressed through your atmospheric and emotional imagery. Awesome expression especially your last two lines. Congratulations, Lily, on your wonderful win. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Huyen Nguyen
Date: 1/22/2019 7:44:00 PM
Susan, your thoughts are very meaningful to me and I appreciate them very much!!!
Date: 1/22/2019 8:51:00 AM
Congratulations Lily! Your poem earned a distinguished place in my contest. This contest was very tough to judge, well done my friend, Emile.
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Huyen Nguyen
Date: 1/22/2019 7:50:00 PM
Emile, I am honored to be a part of your competition and thank you for your kind words and recognition.
Date: 1/10/2019 7:25:00 PM
I like the way this moves along, like the beat of a drum. It kept me moving, and kind of skipping. I liked that a lot, Lily.
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Huyen Nguyen
Date: 1/13/2019 11:10:00 AM
Thank you Caren! I appreciate your comment!

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