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Hermit Crab

Scurrying across the ocean floor leaving faint tracks in the sand moving sideways to go forward nothing mapped or even planned. The sand is always shifting ever changing the terrain all creatures are in hiding misdirected or insane. Go on and on forever waving claws in wild defense abandoned ocean creatures know that none of this makes sense. Seaweed waving, beckoning hypnotic dance of death trust not the grinning clown fish blowing bubbles with their breath. The ancient crusty oyster shell protects the tender meat a grain of sand the irritant spits pearls in mock defeat. The current is relentless overwhelming constant motion and serenity's unheard of at the bottom of the ocean.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 9/12/2008 7:01:00 AM
Congratulations on being featured this week, Danielle. Nicely written and well devised. I suppose that 'serenity's unheard of at the bottom of the ocean.', yet still ,their lives are somewhat like our own. They only seek to thrive in a world where 'the current is relentless'. Not a bad thing, really.:) Great personifications...I enjoyed this piece. Thank you! Best to you and yours...God bless you...Mikki
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Date: 9/10/2008 6:24:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved feature this week Danielle. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/9/2008 7:23:00 PM
I REALLY like that poem--some vivid imagery, enjoyed the cadence. Flowed well...but I had a tough time w/the meter on the line that read "Seaweed waving, beckoning". I enjoyed the final stanza because it wrapped the entire poem up nicely, but left the reader wondering. Nice job!
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Date: 9/9/2008 8:52:00 AM
Congratrulations Danielle, on your poem "Hermit Crab" being featured. Hope all is well. God Bless. Vince
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Date: 9/8/2008 3:57:00 PM
Congratulations Danielle on your amazing poetry being featured this week. Love, Shar
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Date: 9/8/2008 12:07:00 PM
Beautifully written description of ocean life! Congrats on being featured. There have been chunks of time in my life when I too, have had relentless currents and knew no serenity. The Soup is now one of my sources of serenity and your writing has contributed to my increased desire to write. Thank you for being here. love, karen
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Date: 9/8/2008 5:05:00 AM
This truly is a remarkable poem of the wonders found in the ocean - Congrats on having it featured
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Date: 9/7/2008 11:39:00 PM
Congrats on your feature this week.Danielle.Rgds Brian
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