Her Unsmiling Eyes

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                        Even when she laughs, she’s sad
            her smile does not reach her tired eyes
deep within her heart, pain spreads, she feels so bad
life was never her friend, it betrayed her, she cries

                        She has completely forgotten her fieriness
gone is her smile, her happy mask, her frank cheeriness
look around, death surrounds her, she’s lost in soul weariness

      Lonely, she saunters mid trees to find a way out
            birds give her company, the grave’s her hideout
                        here, her unheard tears can shout

She weeps, she cries behind smiles, but she’s not mad
            it is not her fault that whoever she loves, dies
      her desolate life’s filled with dreariness
                        she’s broken, yet strong…penning away all doubt.



07.19.2021


For Constance La France's "Writing Prompt - Fragmented Spaces" contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2021



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Date: 8/17/2021 8:11:00 AM
Jo, congratulations on your win in my Writing Prompt, Fragmented Spaces, using my created form. You made my form look marvelous, well done. I like the proverb image also, this could have been written about me, very emotional ~Constance
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Date: 8/13/2021 9:06:00 PM
Jo, congratulations on your win in Constance's contest . Hugs Eve
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Date: 8/13/2021 3:38:00 PM
Jo, you have appropriated words on each and every line that would be more than enough to try the patience of Job. The melancholic streaming is truly heartfelt of this presumed poetess who had garnered a foothold of her confidences, in the end, a felicitation of a presumptive resolve of assured peace and serenity. Fantastic penning my friend, Aloha!
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Date: 8/13/2021 11:05:00 AM
Laughter can be a mask and heartrending pain a constant companion. So many poignant grieving lines - "unheard tears can shout," "lost in soul weariness." Is there a poet's story in these lines, Jo - penning away all doubt?" Congratulations on your win. Wonderfully done. Sending you blessings of comfort.
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Date: 8/13/2021 11:04:00 AM
Congratulations on your well-deserved top win Jo. You deserve it with this great poem. The imagery, metaphors, and exquisite poetic lines were beautiful.// Blessings
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Date: 8/13/2021 10:54:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a creative and true write. Love It. Have a great/blessed day....................
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Date: 8/13/2021 10:26:00 AM
Simply beautiful! I really enjoyed your poem. Congrats on your fine win, Jo!:-)
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Date: 8/13/2021 10:09:00 AM
Ohhh.....such a sad beautifully written piece... ingenious... Congratulations.
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Date: 8/13/2021 8:07:00 AM
She cries behind her smiles - A very beautiful write. Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 7/23/2021 7:34:00 PM
Jo, The deep grieving wounds feel so real. Some losses feel impossible to overcome. I can relate. Well done! Please keep writing. -Thomas
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Date: 7/19/2021 9:55:00 AM
WoW! What a sad piece this is. Well written with great emotion and good imagery but very sad. God Bless my friend, Good luck in the contest. JB
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Date: 7/19/2021 6:02:00 AM
Superbly done, Jo. The top two lines and the ending line brilliant bookend your poem. A BIG win!
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Date: 7/19/2021 5:29:00 AM
How sad, Jo. (Look who's talking!!) You penned a lovely poem and I am sure it will rate high. Best for a win.
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