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Her Ten Minutes

Her ten minutes sneak Through the hole of an iron needle In the hand of a cobbler, Who sits like a spider At a nook of the city. She is broken on her shoes ; ‘Wait’, his word stumbles over rum stink. Passers by give her tribute With their glances ; and the beauty Blushes under the hot sun. She stoops her proud head , Which sways intermittently Towards the east and the west , To check if some acquaintance Is dropping a belittling eye. For Miss Seena is rich and noble , But with a little money.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 12/28/2011 6:29:00 PM
Looking at this one again. I sure like it! and I see it won in a contest. Congratulations.
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Date: 9/21/2011 12:45:00 PM
Congratulations on your win Fabiyas. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/19/2011 9:20:00 PM
very interesting take on this contest, Fabiyas. Poems about people are so interesting. Congratulations to you
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Date: 9/18/2011 10:35:00 PM
Great lines FABIYAS... a pleasure to read.. a lovely piece..smiles
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Date: 9/17/2011 3:41:00 AM
Congratulations on your accomplished place in the contest "unmentionables"...CR
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Date: 9/17/2011 12:00:00 AM
CONGRATS FABIYAS my friend on your HM in the contest with this fantastic entry luv.. super honor for u..
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Date: 9/9/2011 12:50:00 PM
Fabiyas,i enjoyed Ten minutes. Is miss seena your neighbour?
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Date: 9/8/2011 12:11:00 AM
The first stanza really captures us with its imagery, Fabiyas. Very interesting: ten minutes sneaked through the hole of iron needle!!
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Date: 9/7/2011 7:22:00 AM
I like, 'like a spider at a nook...' You capture her unease deftly.
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Date: 9/7/2011 3:10:00 AM
Very nice Fabiyas.I liked it.
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Date: 9/7/2011 2:15:00 AM
nice to see you around again, fab... this is a daring write with a delicious, sneaky approach to it.. smashing! :) huggs, nette
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