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Her Spirit Woke Her

His fever broke her
With such lying charm
Her spirit woke her
To his mental harm
Left that sad joker

I know it's not iambic pentameter but I was intentionally going for a 5/5/ababa quintain and Sicilian was the closest.

abusebreak upquintain (sicilian)

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Duke Beaufort

September 22, 2025 at 4:26 AM

Danny, iambic pentameter is not the best for being direct. Short is sometimes much more powerful. Good message here about the dangers of lying to a relationship. The only thing that works faster to destroy one is cheating. One's ability to be faithful means a lot. It shows a degree of self-control. Smiles!!

Danny Derden

September 22, 2025 at 1:55 PM

Sadly I've too much second hand experience with these things, female family members have had some rough times...but things are looking up this past year, lessons are being learned & lives are changing trajectory.