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Her Return

Time passes along,
Seen by his heart so heavy,
Angst at her return


First ever try at a Senryu.

Written in Afghanistan -3 SEP 2013

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Paloma P

October 12, 2016 at 3:18 PM

Technically I think this is a Senryu, Haiku's are about nature. Nonetheless, it packs a punch.

Paul Callus

October 12, 2016 at 1:13 PM

I see that this was your first haiku, MC, written 3 years ago! Not bad for a rookie:) I'm looking forward to reading your present day haiku! Regards // paul

Iris E. Sankey- Lewis

April 3, 2016 at 5:34 PM

Okay my friend; type in... example of traditional haiku, or example of contemporary haiku and then you're off...

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

June 28, 2016 at 9:39 AM

Oh...thank you Iris! Sorry I never replied to your comment...I have since done some research on Haikus and have written a few more which I may post soon. Thanks for your comment and help! Appreciate you....MC

Poet Destroyer A

October 29, 2013 at 9:13 AM

Good day Marquis, nice of you to stop by and say hi... :-) :-)... glad the heavy feeling was gone once she returned... enjoyed.. the haiku... LINDA

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

June 28, 2016 at 9:42 AM

Oh my PD...sorry this is super late! Thanks for reading though... I was hoping you'd read my "Under The Same Moon" poem. After reading the collaboration you guys did (and I loved it!) I wrote my own portion....hope you don't mind.... MC

Shanity Rain

October 20, 2013 at 1:10 AM

beautiful , I feel a strong write in less words ! Haiku ! stay safe for us Soldier :)

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

October 21, 2013 at 11:21 PM

Well thank you Shanity -LOL!!! I need to catch up with you...Writing Machine! MC

Jenny Brewer

October 15, 2013 at 5:36 PM

Hoorah, it's as you guys say Awesome. xxx Fab first Haiku. xx

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

October 21, 2013 at 11:20 PM

Thank you Ms Jenny! You are -as we say, AWESOME!!! MC

Skat A

September 24, 2013 at 4:55 PM

Your haiku is very good Marquis...Love ...SKAT

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

October 21, 2013 at 11:18 PM

SKAT! Thank you, sorry this is so late though. I've fallen behind here all over!

John Loving Iii

September 24, 2013 at 2:24 PM

glad to see one of the troopers on the soup. sorry i haven't shared the respect i should have before. sometimes Afganistan doesn't ring out as loud as it does other days. you got the sylables right. but to be an expert it's more than sylables. it's the burst of thought in the readers mind.

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

October 21, 2013 at 11:17 PM

No problem John, thanks for the comment and the advice, yeah these aren't nearly as easy to write as some may think...! MC

Andrea Dietrich

September 21, 2013 at 12:53 AM

I think it is very nice, and I thank you for your remarks on my Good Grief poem. And YES< I WANTED you to laugh at it!!!

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

October 21, 2013 at 11:16 PM

I still remember "Good Grief" very funny! Thanks and so sorry for my late reply here. MC

Sara Kendrick

September 20, 2013 at 10:09 AM

Marquis, very expressive and emotive work..I believe it was written from a heart that has much emotion..Thanks for the visits to my page.."Embrace" was written during my alone time with nature and God out on the porch in the early morn..I am glad that you enjoyed reading it..Sara

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

October 21, 2013 at 11:14 PM

So sorry my reply is so late, things have become a bit unsettled...thank you ever so much for your kind words here Sara!!! MC

Cherie Thomas

September 8, 2013 at 7:56 PM

Your way braver than me:) nice job, MC

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

September 9, 2013 at 7:54 AM

Braver than you....? C'mon girl get out there and give it a shot...you could write a great one!!! LOL Thanks by the way, MC

Len Gasun

September 7, 2013 at 6:47 AM

First try but you did it very well my dear friend MC. Two thumbs up! I love it and so enjoyed. Thank you so much for sharing and your precious time reading my poems. I'm so humbled but I'm glad that you like them. Thank you so much and have a wonderful weekend to you and your love ones. love lots and big hugs, Leonora

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

September 7, 2013 at 10:57 AM

Thanks, I did give it the good ol' college try! And again no problem, I love your work!!! MC