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Her Obsidian Eyes

There’s a masquerade of feeling where no heart is. I try to veil my true feelings of dismay in a shroud. Trudging through the woods of ebony; falling into complete obscurity of shadows and the soul. A world of silence blanketed under and smeared haze of smoke; the night changes to a dark opaque silver sky, and a slow death of the moon. I am drawn to the subtle scent of roses and the weeping sounds of sorrow echoing through the trees. She sits alone, an image of beauty. I must not gaze upon the flawless skin of ebony, braided hair cascading around her shoulder, a dress of crimson wine and rose petals bending off her curves. Her obsidian eyes could hypnotize me into befuddlement, so I stood quite aloof from her. Under a thin layer of veneer, ripped up to the absence of any suture, she weeps for the things she longs for the most. Still must I hear? 6/3/2017
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Dutta Avatar
March 16, 2019 at 10:01 AM
I am mesmerized on your poetic touch with so enriched language n thoughts. BIG CONGRATS.
Canerdy Avatar
March 15, 2019 at 11:00 PM
CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win, Eve! Excellent! Janice
Toney Avatar
March 15, 2019 at 10:06 PM
Eve, this is very dark yet intriguing. The image you chose adds to the mystery. Well done! Congratulations on your win on Mile 24 of my 2019 Poetry Marathon Contest. Only 3 contests to go before the final! ~Mark
Barden Avatar
March 15, 2019 at 9:52 PM
Oh, what a gorgeous write, Eve, filled with romance, mystery, and melancholy - all my favorite elements. Congratulations on your win in the Marathon - blessings, Dear Poet! :-) <3
Ashley Avatar
August 14, 2017 at 8:54 PM
Hi Eve, stunning images you paint with words. This poem is mesmerizing and I agree with Mark about your artistry with words, I hung on every darkly descriptive word phrase... Congratulations on your placement!
Rodrigues Avatar
June 6, 2017 at 9:16 PM
I love especially your 3rd verse! The sorrow of roses. Congrats, Eve!
Scars Avatar
June 6, 2017 at 9:14 PM
oh my dear Eve...you got me with this one! Just the title alone is enough to give me chills. It caught my eye right away and when I was done reading the entire poem, I read it again and again. It was amazing. be blessed. thank you and congrats :)
Robinson Jr. Avatar
June 6, 2017 at 9:21 AM
Stunningly dark and alluringly beautiful, Eve. A jewel of a poem, it really is. Master craftswoman work. Hats off to m'lady for bringing the shock and the aw, shucks I-can't-beat-that look in the competition's eyes. Lol! This reads like a winner. Love and hugs, dear.
Cozart Avatar
June 4, 2017 at 9:45 AM
Beautiful.
Horne Avatar
June 4, 2017 at 7:50 AM
oh, love this dark piece
Leiser Avatar
June 3, 2017 at 11:49 PM
This is poetic excellence and the imagery is stunningly beautiful, Eve! I truly enjoyed it and hope your poem places high in the contest. :)
Dietrich Avatar
June 3, 2017 at 8:04 PM
Wonderfully done, Eve. The imagery goes so well with the words she gave us. I may be wrong, but I think she put a limit on the words. You might want to check that out!
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