Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Poet Narrative

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Heavy Tumbling Story

HEAVY TUMBLING STORY

Before forbidden words
dawn to confess
Come... Come.. C O M E...
Uncoil your taste-buds to me
Entrust you health fully to thee

Yours truly,
FOOD
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Enamored beyond possible reproach
I opened my mouth for crumbs of tasty
Crumbs later become spoonfuls
Spoonfuls turned to one, two, three plateful

Appetite feast in crescendo of daily treats
Boosting my body: front and rear - pound per pound
My clothes then groan: a cri de couer

Yet, desirous mouth craved for more and more
Eating up to the crust and core of everything
Months passed, Bigger! BIGGER, I come to be.

'Til even walking and standing, I can't do
My room - my only day and night intimate boo
My children, I robbed tardily of their joys
As their focus and attention divided by two

Fats stored everywhere on my bod
Gradually they are killing me - stealing my breaths
An oxygen via prongs must be on beside to help me breathe
My back an archipelago of aching ulcer...

Comestibles become my sweetest agony
Breaking me and my dignity so gently 
Obesity then my heavy tumbling story... 
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Food Can't Live with it can't live without it - Poetry Contest
Sponsor	Debbie Guzzi
~~~1st Place~~~
©Olive Eloisa Guillermo
10:51pm, Oct. 17, 2014

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Debbie Guzzi July 24, 2015 at 9:19 PM I so often fall into the habit of thinking of you as a little girl- you are a woman wise beyond your years. I am beyond happy seeing you take a #1. Your friend Debbie Congrad's Light & Love Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 28, 2015 at 11:15 AM Debbie I thank you for placing me but more than that thank you for being my friend.. :D! thanks so much!! most of the people here in Soup tells me so.. :D! but I hope my face younger than my age though ahahha.. :D

Charlotte Puddifoot July 24, 2015 at 11:09 AM this is another excellent piece from you, olive, your poetry's just flying, you're on a winning streak! congrats on your top win in the contest :) Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 28, 2015 at 11:13 AM WEEEEE i just tried to enter this one Charlotte not in my mind to win this high.. :D

Lee Carter July 23, 2015 at 10:53 AM Great write Congratulations on your win! ~ lee Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 28, 2015 at 11:12 AM thanks much Lee.. :D1

Alexis Y. July 23, 2015 at 9:33 AM Olive,I just stopped by to say congratulations on your well deserved 1st place win:-)Alexis Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 28, 2015 at 11:11 AM thanks much Alexis =')!

Richard Lamoureux July 23, 2015 at 8:27 AM Excellent Win! Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 28, 2015 at 11:10 AM thanks much Richard Congrats too!

John Lawless July 23, 2015 at 6:42 AM Well Olive, I learned a new word today. And this poem calls for us to look at our health and eating habits. The problem,sadly, is often more pronounce in the less affluent communities as they have fewer resources and many parents who work two jobs to make ends meet. Congrats on the top spot in the contest. Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 28, 2015 at 11:09 AM Thanks much John.. :D! you are so generous with your comment. :D!

Jan Allison July 23, 2015 at 2:09 AM Dropping back with my congratulations Olive:-) hugs Jan xx Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 26, 2015 at 7:49 PM Thank you so much Jan =')

Dr. Upma A. Sharma July 23, 2015 at 12:52 AM Wow U hv been real awesome here, Congrats on first place win dear Olive! Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 25, 2015 at 9:29 AM thank so you so much Dr. Upma.. :D!

Skat A July 23, 2015 at 12:21 AM Olive, Congratulations on your win, I was amazed by all poem. Forever **SKAT** Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 25, 2015 at 9:02 AM thank you so much SKat... :D!

Val Brooklyn Rogers Blk Panther January 6, 2015 at 6:20 PM Wow. You're. Good OR Guillermo. THAT'S a. Lot to digest. EXCELLENT READ. Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser January 9, 2015 at 12:43 AM Thanks much VAl :) I appreciate you dropping by.. :)!

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty October 23, 2014 at 4:21 AM archipelago of aching ulcer... You are a juggler Olive. An ace juggler. By the way I cannot understand what Comestibles are. Much love.----rajat Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser October 23, 2014 at 8:07 AM comestibles is a collective term for food Rajat if used as a noun and if used comestible without "s" it means edible.. :) thanks for the visit.. :)

Paul Callus October 19, 2014 at 4:39 AM Hi Olive_eloi!! now who's being greedy!! I have a solution for you....cut down on contests because you are having too many treats every time you win!!!:)). But joking apart...I agree that obesity has to be tackled seriously; it's becoming too common, and it is unhealthy. // paul Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser October 20, 2014 at 2:19 AM hahahaha.... well you too :P!!! hahaahhahaj.. thanks much Paul.. :) well i thought poetry can also be a form to spread awareness.. :)

Liam Mcdaid October 19, 2014 at 3:28 AM beautifully penned from the title olive Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser October 20, 2014 at 2:16 AM thanks much Lian..:) God bless you..

Arthur Vaso October 18, 2014 at 11:11 PM Oh dont worry Olive, there is also nice ways to lose weight too!!!!! Life is balance!! Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser October 19, 2014 at 3:09 AM yes i know!! yup life balance. for youcwhat's the best way to reduce anywa?!

Arthur Vaso October 18, 2014 at 11:01 PM Getting fat isnt so bad if you do it together!!! Lets go for ice cream and cake!!! Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser October 18, 2014 at 11:03 PM hahahha :D yes let's go!!!! :D :) :P but well not to much anyway. :D!!!

Jan Allison October 17, 2014 at 5:55 PM you have portrayed this sad state of affairs perfectly Olive:-) Hugs Jan xxx Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser October 19, 2014 at 3:10 AM thanks much sweet Jan.. :)

James Fraser October 17, 2014 at 12:34 PM Fine write on a condition/subject so rife in today's society - James :) Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser October 20, 2014 at 2:22 AM Discipline begins at home.. :) and well control.. James Fraser October 18, 2014 at 11:46 AM I think Parents could do a little more to stem their kids from becoming Obese. Imagine what you could make with the monies spent in McDonald's for a family of four, and what you could buy for the same monies in a Supermarket! Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser October 18, 2014 at 10:09 AM mr, JAmes thanks much.. :)

Sarita Brewer October 17, 2014 at 11:06 AM Your poem is a taste of truth.... ^_^ Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser October 18, 2014 at 7:34 AM thank you Sarita.. :) Indeed..