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Heavy Splendor

so there I was hanging out between the door jam in between the crack and sunlight hoping to grow like the skinny weed trying to break free of the concrete to be better for whoever or worse but lost that diamond ring actually now pushing daisies back up to the sixth floor window somewhere between the street below and hell if I know I had carried that mountain for you wrapped in a big ole lazy bow and waded for you in heavy splendor until that day you came home carrying that poem and said that I should plant my own flowers because you had found another rose

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Date: 3/17/2022 12:25:00 PM
Hello Gabrielle, I also love this poem you created. Well done. It is nice to meetyou. enjoy your day my friend.
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Date: 2/6/2021 8:27:00 PM
Lovely to find this powerful poem published in the 2020 PS Anthology ~ brilliantly penned, a FAVE for me, Gabrielle.
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Date: 10/26/2018 9:21:00 AM
My kind of poetry - so subtle but powerful, leading to an ending which explodes with a surprising big bang! Love it and a fav! Hugs. Pandita
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Gabrielle Jordan
Date: 11/29/2018 8:30:00 PM
Thank you! I'm really happy that you liked it:)
Date: 9/12/2018 5:00:00 AM
Yes, they always seem to find, "another rose". This was a well-crafted piece of poetry, indeed.
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Gabrielle Jordan
Date: 9/12/2018 9:23:00 AM
Many thanks!
Date: 9/9/2018 4:21:00 PM
Another amazing write. "Waded for you in heavy splendor", what an incredible way to describe that feeling, waiting for one you love... and your ending is sublime! As Caren said, it can be taken more than one way- brilliant work!
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Gabrielle Jordan
Date: 9/11/2018 3:35:00 PM
Rhona, you are so kind! Have a great day!
Date: 9/9/2018 8:22:00 AM
Absolutely amazing poem Gabrielle, I have read a few of your pieces, there are some exceptional poets on PS and in my humble opinion you are one of them, thoroughly enjoyed reading. :))
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Gabrielle Jordan
Date: 9/11/2018 3:29:00 PM
Roy, your comments were very kind. Thank you!
Date: 9/9/2018 2:24:00 AM
Ah, it is so beautiful I am diving in for a third read. Gabrielle, this is so much fun, my friend. So thought-provoking, and the ending could be taken in several ways, so I am taking it in at least three of them. I love this!
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Gabrielle Jordan
Date: 9/11/2018 3:30:00 PM
Hey Caren! Thanks:)