Wendy Watson Poet Rhyme

Heartstrings

I smiled when your eyes met my own 
As feet soft as silk touched my skin 
And ever since then I have known 
A bond of love felt deep within. 
And when as a beautiful bride 
You gracefully walked down the aisle 
My heart filled again with such pride
As eyes met once more in a smile.




16.09.20

Charonnet Poetry Contest -sponsored by Charles Messina
ALTERED AFTER THE CONTEST

Completely Your Choice (27)Any Form Any Theme Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Brian Strand

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Linda Alice Fowler October 17, 2020 at 6:31 AM So sweet Wendy :) Congratulations on the win! Linda Wendy Watson January 17, 2022 at 1:09 AM That's kind of you, Linda. Thanks for 'popping by'

Jan Allison October 13, 2020 at 9:54 AM what a touching poem Wendy, Many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx Wendy Watson October 15, 2020 at 6:00 AM Thank you, Jan. I have sinced changed it as the third verse jarred with my sense of rhythm!

Charles Messina October 13, 2020 at 7:41 AM Wendy, I really loved your poem (one of my fav's) But the last stanza was a little off...prob my fault for not explaining the rules well enough. Anyway, thanks for entering my contest and Congratulations on your placement. Hope all is well...hugs Charlie Wendy Watson October 13, 2020 at 7:50 AM Thank you for the placement, Charles. Yes, I understood you to mean that you could change the lines around but had to include every word from line one. I also kept strictly to your prescribed rhyme scheme :ABAB CCDD EFGH II which necessarily altered the rhythm. I really appreciated your kind feedback Charles.

John Watt September 27, 2020 at 7:22 PM Wendy, it does my heart good to see you reveling in the joy of your daughter's birth and wedding - two major milestones in both lives. You handled the contest constraints admirably, and your motherly joy shines brightly. Beautifully done, my friend. Wendy Watson October 9, 2020 at 1:13 AM Thank you so much, John. It goes against the grain to change the rhythm of the final verse though!

Daniel Turner September 16, 2020 at 10:36 AM I am certain you speak for every mother who has birthed a daughter. Very touching, Wendy. Wendy Watson September 20, 2020 at 7:44 AM Of course, Daniel. Each daughter is uniquely special to their Mother. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment.

Heidi Sands September 16, 2020 at 8:35 AM Beautiful poem Wendy. Very nice. Well done :) Wendy Watson September 20, 2020 at 7:43 AM Thank you, Heidi. I would never write one ordinarily with the clash of rhythm between verses but I couldn't do otherwise for this criteria!

Susan Woodrow September 16, 2020 at 6:58 AM lovely write...yes my daughter has been a real blessing for me too :) Wendy Watson September 16, 2020 at 7:10 AM Thank you for taking the time to read and comment,Susan. The change in rhythm required in order to fulfil the rules of the contest clash with my inner rhythmical ear but I was glad to have finally met the tricky criteria!