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Heartstrings

I smiled when your eyes met my own As feet soft as silk touched my skin And ever since then I have known A bond of love felt deep within. And when as a beautiful bride You gracefully walked down the aisle My heart filled again with such pride As eyes met once more in a smile. 16.09.20 Charonnet Poetry Contest -sponsored by Charles Messina ALTERED AFTER THE CONTEST Completely Your Choice (27)Any Form Any Theme Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Brian Strand

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Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 10/17/2020 6:31:00 AM

So sweet Wendy :) Congratulations on the win! Linda

Wendy Watson
Date: 1/17/2022 1:09:00 AM

That's kind of you, Linda. Thanks for 'popping by'

Jan Allison

Date: 10/13/2020 9:54:00 AM

what a touching poem Wendy, Many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Wendy Watson
Date: 10/15/2020 6:00:00 AM

Thank you, Jan. I have sinced changed it as the third verse jarred with my sense of rhythm!

Charles Messina

Date: 10/13/2020 7:41:00 AM

Wendy, I really loved your poem (one of my fav's) But the last stanza was a little off...prob my fault for not explaining the rules well enough. Anyway, thanks for entering my contest and Congratulations on your placement. Hope all is well...hugs Charlie

Wendy Watson
Date: 10/13/2020 7:50:00 AM

Thank you for the placement, Charles. Yes, I understood you to mean that you could change the lines around but had to include every word from line one. I also kept strictly to your prescribed rhyme scheme :ABAB CCDD EFGH II which necessarily altered the rhythm. I really appreciated your kind feedback Charles.

John Watt

Date: 9/27/2020 7:22:00 PM

Wendy, it does my heart good to see you reveling in the joy of your daughter's birth and wedding - two major milestones in both lives. You handled the contest constraints admirably, and your motherly joy shines brightly. Beautifully done, my friend.

Wendy Watson
Date: 10/9/2020 1:13:00 AM

Thank you so much, John. It goes against the grain to change the rhythm of the final verse though!

Daniel Turner

Date: 9/16/2020 10:36:00 AM

I am certain you speak for every mother who has birthed a daughter. Very touching, Wendy.

Wendy Watson
Date: 9/20/2020 7:44:00 AM

Of course, Daniel. Each daughter is uniquely special to their Mother. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment.

Heidi Sands

Date: 9/16/2020 8:35:00 AM

Beautiful poem Wendy. Very nice. Well done :)

Wendy Watson
Date: 9/20/2020 7:43:00 AM

Thank you, Heidi. I would never write one ordinarily with the clash of rhythm between verses but I couldn't do otherwise for this criteria!

Susan Woodrow

Date: 9/16/2020 6:58:00 AM

lovely write...yes my daughter has been a real blessing for me too :)

Wendy Watson
Date: 9/16/2020 7:10:00 AM

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment,Susan. The change in rhythm required in order to fulfil the rules of the contest clash with my inner rhythmical ear but I was glad to have finally met the tricky criteria!