Hearts Retreat

Whenever our worlds collide
                        I nolonger feel so absoleat 
                         you give me sense of pride 
                         Make me feel so complete

                         Are these feelings justified 
                        I can not help but admit defeat 
                          This feeling that l get inside 
                          Happiness it tastes so sweet 

                        An emotional rollercoaster ride 
                        Now that l am falling at your feet 
                        Because whenever we are unified 
                          You are my heart's retreat 


                        
                        

                          

                          

                        
                        cant remember original version I wrote of this but was a little
                           bit different this like many others trying to rework be more poetic more structure and form rather than content
Extra verse feeling a little petrerfied
But was completly knocked off my feet
I'm on this emotional rollercoasteride
It's how it feels when ever we meet

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 12/4/2020 5:23:00 AM
Nice that your’e back,David: Interesting layout portrays a stepping forward. Best, SuZ
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Date: 9/20/2020 7:26:00 PM
This is lovely David - quite a beautiful piece and nicely structured. Really enjoyed reading. Always, Laura
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Date: 9/19/2020 11:56:00 AM
Hello David Scott, you have created a lovey romantic poem. I have enjoyed this poem. xx
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Date: 6/26/2020 11:05:00 PM
Wow superb poem, sensational and romantic in a fine light appealing way and style. Kudos. ...............----------- Plz pleez do read my newest prose and read the related data and info too further down below it in comment section or also in the short story section on site where I have uploaded it.
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Date: 9/19/2020 12:55:00 AM
Thank you for your kind words not been on here since last year still reworking some old writes xx
Date: 1/1/2020 12:31:00 AM
powerful peace to read :) keep writing & sharing..
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Date: 9/19/2020 12:56:00 AM
Thank you your kind words will post some on here again soon xx
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