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Heart--Breaker

My past a mixed brew grilled by time
scarred by an ardor with an expiry date
curdling bone liver heart
dry as refrigerated omellete
a breakfast for one, and later
tea stale in stab of youtube replays
because we are bleeding, leaving
mocked by reality which once glued
our hours together, and now a story
absolutely pulp fiction, hard boiled
to a numb indifference, although
I miss those rugged jeans
scratching gym- stroked thighs
as we fight again again about
the difference between and time and love
while our room screams of
my heartbreaking chains released...at last


2/11/2017
Nicola Bryne’s You Broke My Heart Contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Burch Avatar
February 16, 2017 at 5:39 PM
Nette!! You are so wonderfully gifted!! Well done and congratulations!!! Big Hugggs deb:)
Daniel Avatar
February 15, 2017 at 12:14 AM
What a poetic way to describe heart-breaking pain! Amazing, Nette:) congratulations:)
Smith Avatar
February 14, 2017 at 10:59 AM
Back with congratulations...
Neumann Avatar
February 14, 2017 at 1:57 AM
Passion and insight, this is a very food poem. The migrant breeze of time and hollow whispers. Congratulation, Kai
Krampe Avatar
February 13, 2017 at 5:27 PM
Congrats on your win, nette. What a marvelous poem full of great images.
Garcia Avatar
February 13, 2017 at 4:46 PM
Poetic perfection. Congratulations. Well deserved placement.
Medders Tobechi Avatar
February 13, 2017 at 3:39 PM
"Needles upon chest." Vivid painful imagery of a young love lost. Congratulations on your high placement.
Cadet Avatar
February 12, 2017 at 1:23 AM
Beautifully crafted, Nette. Thank you for sharing. -- Wesley C.
Vinson Avatar
February 11, 2017 at 7:28 PM
Nette - wow, what a great poem!! : )
Andresen Avatar
February 11, 2017 at 1:52 PM
- Young hearts are very vulnerable ... her life is just starting ... - A wonderful poem, Nette - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Smith Avatar
February 11, 2017 at 12:50 PM
So well written Nette, best wishes in the contest...
Datu Avatar
February 11, 2017 at 11:20 AM
Haunting emotions, at least as i read, and captured with such impact. You start and end this exceptional poem with an air of nostalgia---darn unforgettable!
Trifiatis Avatar
February 11, 2017 at 10:17 AM
Poignant writing that expresses so vividly the aches of love at nineteen! She will have many chances to find her true love! Excellent! A seven dear, nette! Good luck!
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