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Heartbreak Falls

Cascading Emotions exploding A deluge of tears flowing freely Waterfall From gushing streaming eyes Diamond dew drops glistening glinting Plummeting Churning, deeply plunging Vertical drop; my heart is breaking Angel falls Rainbow clears misty eyes Sunshine smiles, drying torrent of tears my name was on for contest - been removed for Rob Carmack's Screwed II contest - awarded 9th place with Rob~ 3rd November 2014 Contest:- Some form of Crystalline Sponsor: Nette Onclaud

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/18/2015 6:06:00 PM

Jan, Congratulations on getting the placement your poem did not get the first time... LINDA

Jan Allison
Date: 4/18/2015 6:11:00 PM

Thanks Linda it is quite emotional re reading this - it was penned the day after mum's birthday - the reality was we knew it would be the last time dad would be there to celebrate it with us:-( Hugs Jan xx

Kelly Deschler

Date: 4/17/2015 6:53:00 PM

A bright, warm smile will always chase away the tears... Congrats on placing with this beautiful poem. Very nicely done, Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/17/2015 11:58:00 PM

Thanks Kelly:-) Always a pleasure to get a comment from you:-) Hugs jan xx

Edward Ebbs

Date: 4/15/2015 7:15:00 PM

Congrats Jan, smiles are good :)

Jan Allison
Date: 4/17/2015 11:57:00 PM

Thanks Ed - this was written the day after mum's birthday when I knew dad would no longer be around to see the next one so it really was an emotional write for me:-( Hugs jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 4/15/2015 1:31:00 PM

Beautiful descriptive write, tons of tears that fall like a waterfall when the emotions of the heart are broken a 7 and congratulations on your win. Blessings friend

Jan Allison
Date: 4/15/2015 1:37:00 PM

Thanks Eve - this was written the day after mum's birthday - I was thinking of it being the last time we would celebrate it with dad still with us:-( Hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 4/15/2015 8:55:00 AM

Jan, glad to see your outstanding poem received the placement it deserved. Congratulations! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 4/15/2015 9:52:00 AM

Thanks Sandra I do like Rob's contest to get our poems showcased - i am sure there are many many reasons why we don't place in the first contest including technical glitches:-) Hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 4/15/2015 7:33:00 AM

Congrats on a fine win Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 4/15/2015 9:51:00 AM

Thanks Joseph:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/15/2015 1:13:00 AM

Hey big congrats. You made Rob's list, my friend!!! Hurrah for your poem getting its due!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/15/2015 3:32:00 AM

I am realisitc we can't place in them all Andrea and we have all had ourt fair share of disappointments but the main thing was I had a lot of positive comments anyway and Armand's humour made up for the N/A lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Jacob Frey

Date: 11/20/2014 6:22:00 AM

Amazing poem, great imagery, which also brings some symbolism to it. Also really good use of alliteration, one of the best poems I have read in a long time!!

Jacob Frey
Date: 11/20/2014 6:52:00 AM

you are very welcome just being honest

Jan Allison
Date: 11/20/2014 6:31:00 AM

Thanks so much Jacob I truly appreciate your lovely comment:-) hugs jan

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/7/2014 10:11:00 AM

Jan I love you. You are my dear friend and since you refuse to go to Malta in 2015. I blame myself. I did not try hard enough to change your mind. In the summer of 2015 we can all meet in Toronto. I intend to entertain everyone like they have never been entertained before. On the first night I am doing a full striptease dance and here is the best part I am supplying everyone with a magnifying glass. The point is I enjoy doing this. I am selfish like that.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/7/2014 10:16:00 AM

aww thanks Maurice she says blushing... don't be too hasty we are now thinking of 2015 AND 2016 for Malta:-) am giggling here at your comment:-) Hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/7/2014 9:49:00 AM

Wow, congratulations on your first place win. (have you noticed how high up this is on the list of best new poems)

Jan Allison
Date: 11/7/2014 9:58:00 AM

LOL Maurice you do make me smile thanks for making my day with your kindness:-) Hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/7/2014 7:08:00 AM

Did you fix it because I have counted it several times and the count is right.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/7/2014 7:54:00 AM

No, it's exactly as it was when entered for the contest Maurice - no worries these things happen :-) I do appreciate your care and concern Maurice thank you - you have made my day with your kindness:-) Hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/6/2014 7:20:00 PM

WOW, CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR FIRST PLACE WIN!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/7/2014 4:15:00 AM

ha ha ha behave - Nette has mailed me to say my syllable count was out otherwise I would have been on the list - I'm a winner in my heart so what does it matter but thanks anyway:-) Hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/6/2014 7:19:00 PM

Watch this. I will make you a winner.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/7/2014 4:16:00 AM

:-) Hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/6/2014 7:17:00 PM

I love it. Congratulations on this amazing write.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/7/2014 4:14:00 AM

lol Maurice:-) hugs jan x

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/6/2014 7:08:00 PM

Back to fav this write. All judging is subjective. I don't envy those who run contests. I would of gladly changed positions with you but even that would not have been a high enough ranking. I think what is so hard about these contests it that we send our children out in the rain. We make sure they are dressed in proper rain wear. We make sure they have an umbrella. When they come home drenched and crying. That hurts.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/6/2014 7:14:00 PM

In Nette's last contest I wasn't placed then I appeared on the list - maybe lightning will strike twice lol:-) Hugs jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 11/6/2014 7:11:00 PM

Thanks Maurice I just accept it wasn't what Nette was after - my interpretation of a waterfall obviously didn't meet the criteria but I'm pleased with my poem and the response I got - thanks for caring I do appreciate it:-) Hugs Jan xx

Amelie Mara

Date: 11/5/2014 2:19:00 PM

Dramatic play of words; this is amazing! Thank you for commenting on my work.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/5/2014 2:37:00 PM

Thank you so much Amelie for those lovely words:-) Hugs Jan xx

Pace Ink-U-Script

Date: 11/5/2014 9:22:00 AM

Wow...this is an awesome poem filled with intense imagery...I'm positive that this is a winner!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/5/2014 2:36:00 PM

Thanks so much Pace - i never intended it to be an emotional write but my dad has terminal cancer and I guess the emotions are spilling out at the moment although I am in a good place at the moment I know times will get tough:-( Hugs jan xx

Debra Squyres

Date: 11/4/2014 2:44:00 PM

Bravo, Bravo !! You've taken this waterfall down heartbreaks mountain so beautifully !!! Excellent cadence in this !! Loving all the different takes on the theme !!! She'll have a hard time judging this I'm sure.... Of those I've read so far, yours tops the list in my opinion..

Jan Allison
Date: 11/4/2014 2:46:00 PM

Thank you so much Debra. I am at a very emotional period in my life with my father being terminally ill and I guess this is reflected in my poetry. Hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 11/4/2014 10:20:00 AM

How so much despair can create such explosion of beauty? Excellent dear, Jan, a seven!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/4/2014 11:49:00 AM

Thanks Demetrios - I guess it's my own unique take on the theme based on my current emotions with my father:-( Hugs Jan xx

Cherl Dunn

Date: 11/4/2014 9:18:00 AM

Excellent poem on the saddness of heartachie my dear friend, love the title, it works perfectly with this work of yours, Glad I stopped today to read this one, well done, cheri

Jan Allison
Date: 11/4/2014 11:48:00 AM

Thanks Cherl my current emotions with my father seem to be taking control of my muse at the moment - I never intended the write to be anything like this :-) hugs Jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/4/2014 5:34:00 AM

A very unique way of going with the contest theme..I enjoyed reading your very expressive and emotive work..Reads like winning material to me..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 11/4/2014 11:46:00 AM

Thanks Sara - guess the emotional time with my father is having a great influence on my poetry and this is the way my muse took me:-( Hugs Jan xx

Brandon Harvey

Date: 11/4/2014 4:16:00 AM

Simply beautiful Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 11/4/2014 11:45:00 AM

Thanks Brandon:-) Hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/3/2014 6:49:00 PM

I am sorry Jan. I know you are in good spirits, but I worry about what you have to face when you get home. You know we all love you because what's not to love. I feel like I have known you forever. It is strange how sometimes we just click with people right away. This is an excellent Waterfall write. Nette has a big job ahead of her. I think this challenge has brought about the best writes since I have been here. There are a lot of first place winners and this is one of them. Love You!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/4/2014 2:18:00 AM

Thanks Maurice I am truly happy at the moment - I think this is the best holiday I can remember and I have so many memories to make me smile but the highlight was meeting Paul and his family. I know there are dark days ahead but I know with all the lovely friends I have here I will come through:-) love and hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/3/2014 3:51:00 PM

How are you today? I probably won't have time for emails. Maybe not till late tonight or tomorrow. gotta hurry here and get home to go to the gym. WIsh me luck, Andrea

Jan Allison
Date: 11/3/2014 3:57:00 PM

I'm feeling fabulous got to get packing to go home tomorrow :-( Have some amazing memories :-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/3/2014 3:50:00 PM

Jan, I love seeing where people take these poems on waterfalls. Yours shows your sorrowing state that you are in. Yet you kept it positive at the end, and that was awesome. As the waterfall poems go, yours is on the side of the winners for me!!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/3/2014 3:56:00 PM

Thanks Andrea I'm in a very happy place but I had to go where my muse took me with this write and the emotions flowed like a waterfall:-) hugs jan xx