Headache

The day has been too long. The promise of a scented dawn Lost its fulfilment in the dazzling brilliance Of a hot, bright sun And the tingle of a moment’s rapture Flowed rapidly into the throbbing pulse of insecurity. Noon stretched nerves to a breaking point And tension clung to the midday air As clothes stuck damply to the sweating body. Sunset brought relief, as a peaceful calm Settled down with the night. In the silence of my new-found freedom I gaze upwards into infinity And contemplate the knowledge Fixed in the striking monochrome Of Christ crucified against a paling moon While in his dreams, man savours The rotten splendour of success. ------------------------------------------------------------ Contest: Impress me (with a poem I haven't read yet) Sponsored: Poet Destroyer A (2014) Placed: 5th

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Robert Lindley

Date: 1/23/2015 9:15:00 AM

Well, you certainly impressed me with this jewel my friend! I see that it was a contest win also.. Congrats and I am adding this gem to my fav list. Thank you..

Paul Callus
Date: 1/23/2015 11:03:00 AM

Many thanks Robert! You are kind and supportive; the fav is much appreciated, too. All the best. // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 1/15/2015 2:00:00 PM

I can relate to this one recnetly with stress headaches - great imagery:-) Hugs Pan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 1/16/2015 1:13:00 PM

Luckily I rarely get a headache, but others do, and I hear that migraines are hard to deal with; I sympathize with those who suffer them. Thanks for stopping by:) hugs // paul

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 1/15/2015 7:45:00 AM

Back to congratulate you on your fine win

Paul Callus
Date: 1/16/2015 11:53:00 AM

Thank you Armand; repeat visits are much appreciated. // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 1/15/2015 1:36:00 AM

Well u never fail to impress wid the powerful words Paul ! Great one,, congrats on fine win!

Paul Callus
Date: 1/16/2015 1:09:00 PM

Thank you Upma! Pleased you enjoyed; looking forward to more new posts from you. // paul

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 1/15/2015 1:29:00 AM

No doubt this is impressive Paul,congrats on the win my darling one...huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 1/16/2015 1:07:00 PM

Thank you Ade; so pleased you've been impressed. Take care. // paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/14/2015 10:40:00 PM

Paul, Stopping by to say hi and wish you the best when it comes to any soup contest. Congratulations, on your win. Stop by my latest blog "A Penny For Your Thoughts." If you'd like:) Always & Forever ~LINDA~

Paul Callus
Date: 1/16/2015 11:52:00 AM

Hi Linda! Just visited your blog; thank you for the lovely placing. Hope you're keeping well...take care. /x/ paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/5/2014 12:34:00 PM

wow, this is loaded with some great imagery to convey discomfort and the ending is so profound, Paul. VERy well done for the contest. ( I cannot even think what contest this is!!)

Paul Callus
Date: 10/6/2014 9:36:00 AM

Thank you for your insightful comments, Andrea! This contest was held in Sept, Any New Poem, by Freddie. Unfortunately it did not make it to the winners' list. Have a lovely week. // paul

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/25/2014 12:34:00 PM

A beautiful poem. A gratifying read.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/25/2014 2:14:00 PM

Thank you for the lovely comments, Maurice. Your visits are always most welcome. // paul

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 9/23/2014 4:40:00 PM

really very beautifully drawn paul oh those dreaded headaches delight in reading

Paul Callus
Date: 9/24/2014 3:22:00 PM

Thanks for enjoying the write, Liam....at least I didn't give you a headache!:) // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 9/23/2014 11:02:00 AM

Sure flies high the headache Paul! Two three episodes of migraine every wk n that's me! Captivating last line!

Paul Callus
Date: 9/23/2014 4:48:00 PM

Thank you for enjoying my "headache" Upma!! Sorry about your migraines...they are bad company to keep! Take care. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 9/23/2014 9:00:00 AM

great lines... :) thoughtful :) your last two lines wow!

Paul Callus
Date: 9/23/2014 9:40:00 AM

Thank you for enjoying this poem Olive_eloi! Yes...the last couple of lines are meant to make one think further. (will cu later:)) // paul

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/22/2014 7:42:00 PM

A captivating verse, I too get migraines and often the strobing light of a late afternoon drive starts them. Light & Love

Paul Callus
Date: 9/23/2014 9:34:00 AM

Hi Debbie...fortunately I never get migraines, but headaches do visit sometimes. The bright hot summer days can become too much to deal with at times, and drawing the curtains/ blinds does help. Thanks for stopping by and take care. // paul

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 9/22/2014 5:43:00 PM

Scented dawn/dazzling brilliance/moment 's rapture/rotten splendour and so many other words that I like here,but most of all I love the concept of fixing the eyes into infinity ,into Christ himself,and somehow find the serenity through our faith,Somehow find security again.Somehow that moment through the night in unity with God is the only success that fills the heart with an opportunity of peace.Powerful poem Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/23/2014 9:28:00 AM

Thank you Charm! If I ever were to publish a poetry book I would turn to you to write the forward to it! Your insightful comments are always close to the mark and your understanding remarkable. You would make a good and fair critic, too. Take care. // paul

Casarah Nance

Date: 9/22/2014 5:18:00 PM

What a line-while in his dreams, man savours the rotten splendour of success.- ! throbbing pulse of insecurity-you are giving these lines with the skill of a poet, nicely done! hugs my friend :)

Paul Callus
Date: 9/23/2014 9:18:00 AM

Hi Casarah! I am glad you appreciate this poem which is somewhat different from my usual style of writing. I notice that this post has already been clicked on several times, but comments are limited because it is not so str8 forward. Thank you & hugs Cas. // paul