Paul Callus Poet Free verse

Headache

The day has been too long.
The promise of a scented dawn
Lost its fulfilment in the dazzling brilliance
Of a hot, bright sun
And the tingle of a moment’s rapture
Flowed rapidly into the throbbing pulse of insecurity.
Noon stretched nerves to a breaking point
And tension clung to the midday air
As clothes stuck damply to the sweating body.
Sunset brought relief, as a peaceful calm
Settled down with the night.
In the silence of my new-found freedom
I gaze upwards into infinity
And contemplate the knowledge
Fixed in the striking monochrome
Of Christ crucified against a paling moon
While in his dreams, man savours
The rotten splendour of success.


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Contest: Impress me (with a poem I haven't read yet)
Sponsored: Poet Destroyer A (2014)
Placed: 5th

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Robert Lindley January 23, 2015 at 9:15 AM Well, you certainly impressed me with this jewel my friend! I see that it was a contest win also.. Congrats and I am adding this gem to my fav list. Thank you.. Paul Callus January 23, 2015 at 11:03 AM Many thanks Robert! You are kind and supportive; the fav is much appreciated, too. All the best. // paul

Jan Allison January 15, 2015 at 2:00 PM I can relate to this one recnetly with stress headaches - great imagery:-) Hugs Pan xx Paul Callus January 16, 2015 at 1:13 PM Luckily I rarely get a headache, but others do, and I hear that migraines are hard to deal with; I sympathize with those who suffer them. Thanks for stopping by:) hugs // paul

Maurice Yvonne January 15, 2015 at 7:45 AM Back to congratulate you on your fine win Paul Callus January 16, 2015 at 11:53 AM Thank you Armand; repeat visits are much appreciated. // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma January 15, 2015 at 1:36 AM Well u never fail to impress wid the powerful words Paul ! Great one,, congrats on fine win! Paul Callus January 16, 2015 at 1:09 PM Thank you Upma! Pleased you enjoyed; looking forward to more new posts from you. // paul

Kayod5 Kayode January 15, 2015 at 1:29 AM No doubt this is impressive Paul,congrats on the win my darling one...huggs Paul Callus January 16, 2015 at 1:07 PM Thank you Ade; so pleased you've been impressed. Take care. // paul

Poet Destroyer A January 14, 2015 at 10:40 PM Paul, Stopping by to say hi and wish you the best when it comes to any soup contest. Congratulations, on your win. Stop by my latest blog "A Penny For Your Thoughts." If you'd like:) Always & Forever ~LINDA~ Paul Callus January 16, 2015 at 11:52 AM Hi Linda! Just visited your blog; thank you for the lovely placing. Hope you're keeping well...take care. /x/ paul

Andrea Dietrich October 5, 2014 at 12:34 PM wow, this is loaded with some great imagery to convey discomfort and the ending is so profound, Paul. VERy well done for the contest. ( I cannot even think what contest this is!!) Paul Callus October 6, 2014 at 9:36 AM Thank you for your insightful comments, Andrea! This contest was held in Sept, Any New Poem, by Freddie. Unfortunately it did not make it to the winners' list. Have a lovely week. // paul

Maurice Yvonne September 25, 2014 at 12:34 PM A beautiful poem. A gratifying read. Paul Callus September 25, 2014 at 2:14 PM Thank you for the lovely comments, Maurice. Your visits are always most welcome. // paul

Liam Mcdaid September 23, 2014 at 4:40 PM really very beautifully drawn paul oh those dreaded headaches delight in reading Paul Callus September 24, 2014 at 3:22 PM Thanks for enjoying the write, Liam....at least I didn't give you a headache!:) // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma September 23, 2014 at 11:02 AM Sure flies high the headache Paul! Two three episodes of migraine every wk n that's me! Captivating last line! Paul Callus September 23, 2014 at 4:48 PM Thank you for enjoying my "headache" Upma!! Sorry about your migraines...they are bad company to keep! Take care. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 23, 2014 at 9:00 AM great lines... :) thoughtful :) your last two lines wow! Paul Callus September 23, 2014 at 9:40 AM Thank you for enjoying this poem Olive_eloi! Yes...the last couple of lines are meant to make one think further. (will cu later:)) // paul

Debbie Guzzi September 22, 2014 at 7:42 PM A captivating verse, I too get migraines and often the strobing light of a late afternoon drive starts them. Light & Love Paul Callus September 23, 2014 at 9:34 AM Hi Debbie...fortunately I never get migraines, but headaches do visit sometimes. The bright hot summer days can become too much to deal with at times, and drawing the curtains/ blinds does help. Thanks for stopping by and take care. // paul

Charmaine Chircop September 22, 2014 at 5:43 PM Scented dawn/dazzling brilliance/moment 's rapture/rotten splendour and so many other words that I like here,but most of all I love the concept of fixing the eyes into infinity ,into Christ himself,and somehow find the serenity through our faith,Somehow find security again.Somehow that moment through the night in unity with God is the only success that fills the heart with an opportunity of peace.Powerful poem Paul. Paul Callus September 23, 2014 at 9:28 AM Thank you Charm! If I ever were to publish a poetry book I would turn to you to write the forward to it! Your insightful comments are always close to the mark and your understanding remarkable. You would make a good and fair critic, too. Take care. // paul

Casarah Nance September 22, 2014 at 5:18 PM What a line-while in his dreams, man savours the rotten splendour of success.- ! throbbing pulse of insecurity-you are giving these lines with the skill of a poet, nicely done! hugs my friend :) Paul Callus September 23, 2014 at 9:18 AM Hi Casarah! I am glad you appreciate this poem which is somewhat different from my usual style of writing. I notice that this post has already been clicked on several times, but comments are limited because it is not so str8 forward. Thank you & hugs Cas. // paul