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The day has been too long. The promise of a scented dawn Lost its fulfilment in the dazzling brilliance Of a hot, bright sun And the tingle of a moment’s rapture Flowed rapidly into the throbbing pulse of insecurity. Noon stretched nerves to a breaking point And tension clung to the midday air As clothes stuck damply to the sweating body. Sunset brought relief, as a peaceful calm Settled down with the night. In the silence of my new-found freedom I gaze upwards into infinity And contemplate the knowledge Fixed in the striking monochrome Of Christ crucified against a paling moon While in his dreams, man savours The rotten splendour of success. ------------------------------------------------------------ Contest: Impress me (with a poem I haven't read yet) Sponsored: Poet Destroyer A (2014) Placed: 5th

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Date: 1/23/2015 9:15:00 AM
Well, you certainly impressed me with this jewel my friend! I see that it was a contest win also.. Congrats and I am adding this gem to my fav list. Thank you..
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Paul Callus
Date: 1/23/2015 11:03:00 AM
Many thanks Robert! You are kind and supportive; the fav is much appreciated, too. All the best. // paul
Date: 1/15/2015 2:00:00 PM
I can relate to this one recnetly with stress headaches - great imagery:-) Hugs Pan xx
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Date: 1/16/2015 1:13:00 PM
Luckily I rarely get a headache, but others do, and I hear that migraines are hard to deal with; I sympathize with those who suffer them. Thanks for stopping by:) hugs // paul
Date: 1/15/2015 7:45:00 AM
Back to congratulate you on your fine win
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Date: 1/16/2015 11:53:00 AM
Thank you Armand; repeat visits are much appreciated. // paul
Date: 1/15/2015 1:36:00 AM
Well u never fail to impress wid the powerful words Paul ! Great one,, congrats on fine win!
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Date: 1/16/2015 1:09:00 PM
Thank you Upma! Pleased you enjoyed; looking forward to more new posts from you. // paul
Date: 1/15/2015 1:29:00 AM
No doubt this is impressive Paul,congrats on the win my darling one...huggs
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Date: 1/16/2015 1:07:00 PM
Thank you Ade; so pleased you've been impressed. Take care. // paul
Date: 1/14/2015 10:40:00 PM
Paul, Stopping by to say hi and wish you the best when it comes to any soup contest. Congratulations, on your win. Stop by my latest blog "A Penny For Your Thoughts." If you'd like:) Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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Date: 1/16/2015 11:52:00 AM
Hi Linda! Just visited your blog; thank you for the lovely placing. Hope you're keeping well...take care. /x/ paul
Date: 10/5/2014 12:34:00 PM
wow, this is loaded with some great imagery to convey discomfort and the ending is so profound, Paul. VERy well done for the contest. ( I cannot even think what contest this is!!)
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Date: 10/6/2014 9:36:00 AM
Thank you for your insightful comments, Andrea! This contest was held in Sept, Any New Poem, by Freddie. Unfortunately it did not make it to the winners' list. Have a lovely week. // paul
Date: 9/25/2014 12:34:00 PM
A beautiful poem. A gratifying read.
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Date: 9/25/2014 2:14:00 PM
Thank you for the lovely comments, Maurice. Your visits are always most welcome. // paul
Date: 9/23/2014 4:40:00 PM
really very beautifully drawn paul oh those dreaded headaches delight in reading
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Date: 9/24/2014 3:22:00 PM
Thanks for enjoying the write, Liam....at least I didn't give you a headache!:) // paul
Date: 9/23/2014 11:02:00 AM
Sure flies high the headache Paul! Two three episodes of migraine every wk n that's me! Captivating last line!
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Date: 9/23/2014 4:48:00 PM
Thank you for enjoying my "headache" Upma!! Sorry about your migraines...they are bad company to keep! Take care. // paul
Date: 9/23/2014 9:00:00 AM
great lines... :) thoughtful :) your last two lines wow!
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Date: 9/23/2014 9:40:00 AM
Thank you for enjoying this poem Olive_eloi! Yes...the last couple of lines are meant to make one think further. (will cu later:)) // paul
Date: 9/22/2014 7:42:00 PM
A captivating verse, I too get migraines and often the strobing light of a late afternoon drive starts them. Light & Love
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Date: 9/23/2014 9:34:00 AM
Hi Debbie...fortunately I never get migraines, but headaches do visit sometimes. The bright hot summer days can become too much to deal with at times, and drawing the curtains/ blinds does help. Thanks for stopping by and take care. // paul
Date: 9/22/2014 5:43:00 PM
Scented dawn/dazzling brilliance/moment 's rapture/rotten splendour and so many other words that I like here,but most of all I love the concept of fixing the eyes into infinity ,into Christ himself,and somehow find the serenity through our faith,Somehow find security again.Somehow that moment through the night in unity with God is the only success that fills the heart with an opportunity of peace.Powerful poem Paul.
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Paul Callus
Date: 9/23/2014 9:28:00 AM
Thank you Charm! If I ever were to publish a poetry book I would turn to you to write the forward to it! Your insightful comments are always close to the mark and your understanding remarkable. You would make a good and fair critic, too. Take care. // paul
Date: 9/22/2014 5:18:00 PM
What a line-while in his dreams, man savours the rotten splendour of success.- ! throbbing pulse of insecurity-you are giving these lines with the skill of a poet, nicely done! hugs my friend :)
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Date: 9/23/2014 9:18:00 AM
Hi Casarah! I am glad you appreciate this poem which is somewhat different from my usual style of writing. I notice that this post has already been clicked on several times, but comments are limited because it is not so str8 forward. Thank you & hugs Cas. // paul