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This is actually a true story. I was 12 years old and my older brother was 14. Sometimes the littleler guy gets the upper-hand...and boy, the elder brother well deserved a whoopin' this time (lol)

He Will Never Do That Again

On a sun-filled day, and a cloudless sky 
We yearned adventure...my brother and I 
The woods out yonder- called our names 
Traveling echoes, spoke..."let's play games" 

Early aged, our thrill- playing (Hide-n-Seek) 
We'd play for hours, near "Crooked Creek" 
As I hid motionless- in a ditch of clay 
A grown-ups voice; whispered "Come this way" 

A strangers voice- I heard... I cried 
When he spoke low-pitched, said- "I saw you hide" 
When I turned my neck, goose-bumped from fear 
I peed my pants- seen no one there  

In my soaked undies, and my yellowed jeans 
I yelled to my brother...to hear my screams 
My devilish brother, jumped...from a tree 
And laughed like hell, said "That was me" 

So, I chased his tail 'round "Picken's Pass" 
And for the first time ever- I kicked his ...  



Story From Your Childhood Poetry Contest 
Sponsor: L. Milton Hawkins 
12-8-2020
Copyright © | Year Posted 2020

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Ligon Avatar
December 12, 2020 at 9:34 PM
Lol, well told story from your childhood. Congrats on your placement!
Wolf Avatar
December 12, 2020 at 5:57 PM
Great story, Charlie! Thanks for the chuckles. Laughter and Light, Gershon
Goldsmith Avatar
December 12, 2020 at 8:03 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a "Wonderful" story/write. I can see it all before me. A book is what you need to write. Bet you had a ton of fun in those many years growing up. Enjoy your win with blessings..........................
Kauffman Avatar
December 11, 2020 at 9:01 PM
What goes around truly does come around, Charlie! Great story! Congrats on your win and kudos for turning the tables! All the best!
Gauthier Avatar
December 11, 2020 at 11:31 AM
Great story, Charles. Heck of a story teller. Totally charming ~
Schiavina Avatar
December 11, 2020 at 7:54 AM
Delightful story and so well written. Congratulations!
Logan Avatar
December 11, 2020 at 2:53 AM
Charlie, what a wonderful story, and one that will forever be told in your family. The adrenalin from anger you felt fueled your ability to catch him and give him 'what for.' Congratulations on your winning entry.
Messina Avatar
December 11, 2020 at 3:18 AM
Hi Jenna, thank you so much for your lovely comments. Some memories we just never forge, like this one. I never ran so fast chasing him down (lol) Hugs.. Charlie
Mitra Avatar
December 10, 2020 at 9:05 PM
Haha Charles loved the poem...Congrats on your win :)
Messina Avatar
December 11, 2020 at 2:53 AM
Thank you so much, Carol :)
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December 10, 2020 at 8:55 PM
Charles, congratulations on coming in #4 in my Story From Your Childhood contest. You came so close to coming in third. I would have appreciated you using the final word instead of the dashes! I loved your poem, frankly, so I can only say the competition was fierce!
Messina Avatar
December 11, 2020 at 3:04 AM
Hi Lennie, thank you so much for my fantastic placement in your contest. You had some great entries! I wasn't sure if I should have put that word in there or not, some people may have thought it to be inappropriate...Oh well, Truly honored to place in your contest. All the best.. Charlie
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December 9, 2020 at 11:03 AM
Well, there's no doubt what that final word would be, Charlie. I guess big brothers can be mean sometimes. You and he probably laugh about this event now. Really enjoyed reading this poem! It's a great entry for the contest. Winning wishes coming your way. Hugs, Carolyn
Messina Avatar
December 11, 2020 at 3:13 AM
Carolyn, I have 3 older brothers and 1 older sister so I had my share of getting picked on...but, I also have 2 younger siblings so I had my share of being the pickee..lol Thank you for your wishes..they worked :) Hugs, Charlie
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December 9, 2020 at 5:22 AM
Enjoyed the tone of your fun story Charlie--isn't it lovely to recall our childhood and silly things we did!
Messina Avatar
December 11, 2020 at 3:09 AM
Thank you, Vijay. It is wonderful to recall our childhood. So many things we could look back at and laugh about. Growing up with 6 siblings I could write a book about all the silly things we've done (lol) Have a nice day my friend.. Charlie
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December 8, 2020 at 6:30 PM
Lol! Charlie, As I began to read I didn't know what to expect. Oh boy,I was in store for an inspected twist. You know they say ”Payback is a.....! I think he got what he deserved. Best wishes in the contest. Have a good evening:-) Alexis
Messina Avatar
December 8, 2020 at 7:30 PM
LOL...Yes, Alexis...paybacks! Have a wonderful evening :) Hugs
Ashley Avatar
December 8, 2020 at 6:00 PM
Haha! I'm glad your gave your bratty older brother a whoopin'!! I loved your fun and fantastic poem, Charlie. Your gifted pen shines! Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you! ~Susan
Messina Avatar
December 8, 2020 at 7:33 PM
Hello, my dear friend, Susan. Growing up 5th out of seven I sure got my share of picking-on (LOL) Thank you for your charming comment and for the wishes. Warmest wishes, Always.. Charlie
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December 8, 2020 at 5:44 PM
Lol! I’m glad you got him back :) best wishes in the contest...
Messina Avatar
December 8, 2020 at 7:36 PM
When he fell asleep, I painted something on his forehead (not sayin' what)... Paybacks are sweet...LOL. Thank you, Akkina. Hugs Charlie
Andresen Avatar
December 8, 2020 at 5:30 PM
- Scary for a young boy ... but fun to read many years later, Charlie :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Messina Avatar
December 8, 2020 at 7:38 PM
Being the 4th of 5 boys I got picked on by my siblings...But I had 2 younger siblings as well...I was no angel..(lol) Hugs // Charlie
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