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He Lingers

Deep in the forest he lingers
Not a fire, not a light to be seen
No relief for his icy-cold fingers
No bed for his back, tall and lean

Not a fire, not a light to be seen
Yet he sits there as the crickets sing
No bed for his back, tall and lean
But no matter, for he is no king.

Yet he sits there as the crickets sing
Closes his eyes and whispers her name
But no matter, for he is no king,
A betrothal would only bring shame.

He closes his eyes and whispers her name, 
No relief for his icy-cold fingers
A betrothal to him would only bring shame
So deep in the forest, he lingers.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 4/24/2018 6:18:00 PM
An awesome pantoum Juli-Michelle! Sad, dark, and beautiful!
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Date: 6/27/2017 2:53:00 PM
wow, I think this is one of the best examples I have seen for Pantoum poetry. Like Akkina, this is one to fave!! BTW, thanks so much for my win!
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Date: 6/8/2017 8:40:00 AM
Beautiful write Juli.
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Date: 6/6/2017 5:45:00 PM
Oh I love love this. Flow so beautifully! A fave, Juli-Michelle :)
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Date: 6/5/2017 11:25:00 PM
Sad but so strong with smooth flow of repeated lines. inspired to take chance. Congrats
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Date: 6/4/2017 7:41:00 AM
oh, love this sad but powerful pantoum
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Date: 6/4/2017 1:27:00 AM
Nice poem. Enjoyed! I'm entering your contest with no expectations—Just would like to thank you for prompting me to tackle this fun form.
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Date: 5/31/2017 3:55:00 AM
Nice pantoum, Juli-Michelle:) great use of the repetitive lines too:)
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Date: 5/30/2017 11:21:00 PM
So sad and yet beautiful. I can see the appeal of the pantoum in this compelling poem.
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Date: 5/30/2017 12:50:00 PM
A nicely woven peace, with ease in delivery. A beautiful read ... //Peace & Blessings
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Date: 5/30/2017 12:17:00 PM
Really nice Juli - Michelle. you did a great job with this. It flows smoothly and the rhymes are beautifully crafted.
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