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He Lay Down Defeated By Lover

He was tough, he’d been raised to be big, fit and strong, 
To hide any hurt, pain or fear.
He’d prepared for this fight, bottling his feelings, 
Living an unemotional atmosphere. 

Then the time had arrived, a fight till the end,
He had to win this fight at any price.
His opponent knocked on his door, ready to take him on,
By casually rolling the dice.

He swung to the left and glanced to the right, 
Then an uppercut straight to the chin.
Then he kicked like a soldier, a seasoned marine,
And he thought he was going to win.

But his opponent was smart, and took all of his rage,
Took it with one boxing glove.
His opponent she won, so he lay down defeated,
Defeated by that emotion called love.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Lindley Avatar
June 10, 2016 at 5:19 AM
You expressed the true power of love in this poem so very well. I've been knocked down for 12 glorious years now and its such a wonderful feeling. Super 7 on this my friend.
Canerdy Avatar
June 4, 2016 at 7:32 AM
A 7 for sure, Lewis! Janice
Raynes Avatar
June 5, 2016 at 8:51 PM
Thanks Janice
Dietrich Avatar
June 3, 2016 at 8:14 PM
Is this in the contest about the jaws drop? If not, it should be.
Raynes Avatar
June 5, 2016 at 8:51 PM
I entered after u suggested.
Dietrich Avatar
June 3, 2016 at 8:13 PM
oh wow, I LOVE this. how it ended up being a metaphor for "falling" for love. GREAT writing, and thanks so much for appreciating my drug poem!!
Raynes Avatar
June 5, 2016 at 8:51 PM
Thanks Andrea, and ur poetry inspired me and heaps of others, thanks .
Nance Avatar
June 3, 2016 at 6:28 AM
Oh that was great, I had no idea where you were going with it until the last line. You have me hooked with this knockout. well done! ;)
Raynes Avatar
June 5, 2016 at 8:50 PM
Thanks Casarah, love is the toughest battle.
Daniel Avatar
June 3, 2016 at 3:31 AM
Beautiful poem, Lewis:) a great pic to go with it:) How true that "love conquers all":)
Raynes Avatar
June 5, 2016 at 8:49 PM
Thanks Jo, glad u enjoyed the ride.
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