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He Lay Down Defeated By Lover

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He was tough, he’d been raised to be big, fit and strong, To hide any hurt, pain or fear. He’d prepared for this fight, bottling his feelings, Living an unemotional atmosphere. Then the time had arrived, a fight till the end, He had to win this fight at any price. His opponent knocked on his door, ready to take him on, By casually rolling the dice. He swung to the left and glanced to the right, Then an uppercut straight to the chin. Then he kicked like a soldier, a seasoned marine, And he thought he was going to win. But his opponent was smart, and took all of his rage, Took it with one boxing glove. His opponent she won, so he lay down defeated, Defeated by that emotion called love.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 6/10/2016 5:19:00 AM
You expressed the true power of love in this poem so very well. I've been knocked down for 12 glorious years now and its such a wonderful feeling. Super 7 on this my friend.
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Date: 6/4/2016 7:32:00 AM
A 7 for sure, Lewis! Janice
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Lewis Raynes
Date: 6/5/2016 8:51:00 PM
Thanks Janice
Date: 6/3/2016 8:14:00 PM
Is this in the contest about the jaws drop? If not, it should be.
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Date: 6/5/2016 8:51:00 PM
I entered after u suggested.
Date: 6/3/2016 8:13:00 PM
oh wow, I LOVE this. how it ended up being a metaphor for "falling" for love. GREAT writing, and thanks so much for appreciating my drug poem!!
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Date: 6/5/2016 8:51:00 PM
Thanks Andrea, and ur poetry inspired me and heaps of others, thanks .
Date: 6/3/2016 6:28:00 AM
Oh that was great, I had no idea where you were going with it until the last line. You have me hooked with this knockout. well done! ;)
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Lewis Raynes
Date: 6/5/2016 8:50:00 PM
Thanks Casarah, love is the toughest battle.
Date: 6/3/2016 3:31:00 AM
Beautiful poem, Lewis:) a great pic to go with it:) How true that "love conquers all":)
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Lewis Raynes
Date: 6/5/2016 8:49:00 PM
Thanks Jo, glad u enjoyed the ride.

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