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Hanging By a Thread

As I hang from a cord of silken repent
No hesitation for the lives I leave you
Please quarter my faith and unwind this lament
I know not of her love and drown in the truth
We have searched for some solace in time spent
And now in the darkness you have found limbo too

She dances around the gallows as I sway
Singing songs from her demons born from the day.

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James Peranteau Date: 2/28/2015 8:41:00 PM This is another fantastic write ! On the sixth line in your first stanza: incert 'in', after "And now"....it will give the line its metrical feet it well deserves. This is a class A write dear poet....I'm already hooked...definately going to read the rest of your writes now....have a great journey.....much love, james P.s...rid the comma on same line, it is already implied. Login to Reply Lewis Michael Date: 2/28/2015 8:55:00 PM Thank you for your kind words and for sharing your poetic wisdom with me, I have now edited the poem. I am moved and uplifted that you have enjoyed my writing. I will be sure to check out your writes, much love, Lewis.

Shnkimmel Clarke Date: 2/28/2015 7:00:00 PM Great write.. Welcome to the soup! I'm back after it's been awhile check me out (don't be shy to comment lol) Login to Reply Lewis Michael Date: 2/28/2015 7:12:00 PM Thank you kindly, your welcomes are a blessing, I will be sure to check out your writings.