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Hang On To Loose Ends

death is very clear 
                 not like blurred reality 
               where snags just appear
           and if strings remain attached 
              we can find the puppeteer 


Bite Size Poem 2 Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Line Gauthier
26/05//2021
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Kim Merryman

Date: 5/30/2021 7:11:00 PM

An excellent tanka, David! Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim M

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/31/2021 12:19:00 AM

Thank you Kim, a metaphor meant to appeal to the abstract, cheers David

Greg Gaul

Date: 5/29/2021 1:12:00 PM

Well crafted metaphor with the puppeteer David. Excellent rhymes make this a high finisher even though you faint with the unfaithful in your thematic. Courageous choice. Well done.

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/29/2021 3:22:00 PM

Thank you Greg, I’m delighted you dropped by, indeed I have more faith as a free thinker now, unhindered by organisation, only restricted by my own imagination, I was delighted with the placement, cheers David

Sam Kauffman

Date: 5/29/2021 11:04:00 AM

Congrats and kudos on your win David. Wonderful metaphorical write. Love the puppetry imagery. All the best!

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/29/2021 11:11:00 AM

Heya Sam, was great to get a good placement, indeed it is all metaphorical, sometimes I prefer the abstract to appeals to a different part of the brain, cheers David

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/29/2021 8:34:00 AM

This is thought provoking indeed. Deep poem. I like how you did this one. Congrats on your win.

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/29/2021 11:07:00 AM

Thank you Andrea, if it provokes your thoughts it can’t be bad, I’m delighted with the placement, cheers David

Alexis Y.

Date: 5/27/2021 11:23:00 AM

WoW! David, What a well-written write. Your final two lines were thought-provoking. Well done. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day and weekend:-) Alexis

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/27/2021 12:26:00 PM

Thank you Alexis, It’s a soul searching write literally, I love to ponder the meaning of life, and try put it into a poem, and if it provokes some thoughts with the reader, all the better, cheers David

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 5/27/2021 11:22:00 AM

What Milt just said David. Dead or death puppet on strings

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/27/2021 12:19:00 PM

So what’s the puppeteers end game Christopher, I have to keep probing, if it cannot be found in life, I must examine death, cheers David

L Milton Hankins

Date: 5/26/2021 2:20:00 PM

So interesting and thought-provoking. Amazing how much can be said or implied in a few short lines. Good job!

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/26/2021 2:29:00 PM

Thanks Milton, sometimes I do get surprised myself, at the power of just a few lines, only those who have an open imagination will see it, cheers David