David Kavanagh Poet Tanka

Hang On To Loose Ends

death is very clear 
                 not like blurred reality 
               where snags just appear
           and if strings remain attached 
              we can find the puppeteer 


Bite Size Poem 2 Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Line Gauthier
26/05//2021
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Kim Merryman May 30, 2021 at 7:11 PM An excellent tanka, David! Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim M David Kavanagh May 31, 2021 at 12:19 AM Thank you Kim, a metaphor meant to appeal to the abstract, cheers David

Greg Gaul May 29, 2021 at 1:12 PM Well crafted metaphor with the puppeteer David. Excellent rhymes make this a high finisher even though you faint with the unfaithful in your thematic. Courageous choice. Well done. David Kavanagh May 29, 2021 at 3:22 PM Thank you Greg, I’m delighted you dropped by, indeed I have more faith as a free thinker now, unhindered by organisation, only restricted by my own imagination, I was delighted with the placement, cheers David

Sam Kauffman May 29, 2021 at 11:04 AM Congrats and kudos on your win David. Wonderful metaphorical write. Love the puppetry imagery. All the best! David Kavanagh May 29, 2021 at 11:11 AM Heya Sam, was great to get a good placement, indeed it is all metaphorical, sometimes I prefer the abstract to appeals to a different part of the brain, cheers David

Andrea Dietrich May 29, 2021 at 8:34 AM This is thought provoking indeed. Deep poem. I like how you did this one. Congrats on your win. David Kavanagh May 29, 2021 at 11:07 AM Thank you Andrea, if it provokes your thoughts it can’t be bad, I’m delighted with the placement, cheers David

Alexis Y. May 27, 2021 at 11:23 AM WoW! David, What a well-written write. Your final two lines were thought-provoking. Well done. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day and weekend:-) Alexis David Kavanagh May 27, 2021 at 12:26 PM Thank you Alexis, It’s a soul searching write literally, I love to ponder the meaning of life, and try put it into a poem, and if it provokes some thoughts with the reader, all the better, cheers David

Christopher Flaherty May 27, 2021 at 11:22 AM What Milt just said David. Dead or death puppet on strings David Kavanagh May 27, 2021 at 12:19 PM So what’s the puppeteers end game Christopher, I have to keep probing, if it cannot be found in life, I must examine death, cheers David

L Milton Hankins May 26, 2021 at 2:20 PM So interesting and thought-provoking. Amazing how much can be said or implied in a few short lines. Good job! David Kavanagh May 26, 2021 at 2:29 PM Thanks Milton, sometimes I do get surprised myself, at the power of just a few lines, only those who have an open imagination will see it, cheers David

Darlene De Beaulieu May 26, 2021 at 12:27 PM Hello David Kavangh, i love the last two lines of your poetry. Enjoy your day my friend. Darlene De Beaulieu May 26, 2021 at 3:16 PM HeyA David well you never know. Cheers. Darlene David Kavanagh May 26, 2021 at 12:39 PM Heya Darlene, thank you for the visit as always, hopefully my metaphoric strings leads us all to the metaphoric puppeteers, cheers David