Haiku Three

Rabbit leaps forward
Rear feet leave marks on the snow
that white fur can't hide

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Date: 10/30/2014 6:51:00 AM
That sure is a cool image, I can see little prints decorating the snow. :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/30/2014 8:58:00 AM
Good morning and thanks. I am short on time these days, please be patient with me.
Date: 5/21/2014 6:51:00 PM
Let's see what's in page 7, I thought. NICE Haiku, Richard!!!! I love this Haiku & I also love Rabbits! I owned two! Their names were Hansel & Gretel!! It's true. I enjoyed your Haiku.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/21/2014 6:56:00 PM
Thanks again Ivo. I have a friend who's pet rabbit lived 17 years.
Date: 1/6/2013 3:59:00 PM
a nice picture, richard. I remember doing one about a rabbit one time!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/7/2013 7:48:00 PM
Dont know why I wrote about a rabbit, maybe residual affect from Easter.
Date: 1/6/2013 5:52:00 AM
the subject is now clear [rabbit] as a free verse writer coming to haiku was hard and this write is now more objective so that's a big speak in the right direction until you get a hold of the conceptual 'hang of it' try line 1 suject/line 2 action [one action only..since it's one frozen moment in time] & line 3 the surprise bit of sensory input [line 3 is the hardest to 'get']
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/6/2013 5:58:00 AM
my monoku [which means only haiku in a single line] [smudged charcoal on a full page--the kettle whistles] the subject is the drawing 'shown' by the smudged charcoal- showing rather than telling is the main key to haiku bringing the reader into the moment with the poet..my line 2 would have been on a full page [3/4/5] this is a modern haiku..you need to work awhile on the traditional ones
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/6/2013 5:54:00 AM
a white rabbit/leaps leaving prints in the snow--a coyote howls
Date: 1/6/2013 3:19:00 AM
creates a nice visual....:)
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Date: 1/5/2013 10:30:00 PM
Really a great Haiku my friend. Rollo
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/6/2013 12:23:00 AM
Thanks Rollo
Date: 1/5/2013 10:25:00 PM
Great haiku Richard
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/6/2013 12:23:00 AM
Thanks Carma
Date: 1/5/2013 6:49:00 PM
try for 'simple as porridge'[ Jack Kerouac, On the Road ... “A real haiku's gotta be as simple as porridge and yet make you see the real thing] if you are speaking of a rabbit say rabbit and the juxtaposed line must be a surprise, cause and affect is an easy trap to fall in but if you think is this tid-bit of info I am gifting a shift in perspective, a surprise bit of extra info? that will help you. Light & Love
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/6/2013 12:25:00 AM
Does this work better?
Date: 1/5/2013 6:32:00 PM
Visual puzzle...nice
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/6/2013 12:24:00 AM
Thanks, I hope you still like with changes Imade
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