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Haiku Number Seventeen

Winter hazel weeps Her barren branches bowed down No nuts for robin

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Date: 2/4/2010 11:26:00 AM

Bit of a surprise in the last line for the reader to enjoy. Nice use of alliteration in the first and second lines. Thank you for sharing your poem with us and for your kind comment. Keep on writing!!!! Karen

L'Nass Shango

Date: 3/19/2009 5:14:00 AM

Her barren branches bowed - a beautiful reversal of expectation.

Raul Moreno

Date: 1/31/2009 8:39:00 PM

Lovely, your words are nicely penned on this one painting a lovely scene...Raul

Maryam Jameela Haniff

Date: 1/31/2009 7:17:00 AM

great! the image n flow is perfect...can't wait for 18 19 20..good luck!..love Maryam

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 1/31/2009 6:02:00 AM

Neat alliterations and marvelous word choices... BRAVO Deirdre! Best wishes, Keith

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 1/31/2009 2:57:00 AM

Poor little thing, soon there will be fat worms for her! vivid haiku, Love, Kristin

Sean Kelly

Date: 1/31/2009 12:02:00 AM

Poor Robin , Deirdre ; But what about Batman ??..... Great & topical 17 , now let's have 18 ....

Amy Swanson

Date: 1/30/2009 1:52:00 PM

I love this, what a vivid picture of winter that is painted here. Poor little robin! :) Lovely haiku. Blessings... Amy. :)