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Deirdre Omaidin

Haiku Number Seventeen

Winter hazel weeps
Her barren branches bowed down
No nuts for robin

Copyright © Deirdre Omaidin | Year Posted 2009

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February 4, 2010 at 11:26 AM

Bit of a surprise in the last line for the reader to enjoy. Nice use of alliteration in the first and second lines. Thank you for sharing your poem with us and for your kind comment. Keep on writing!!!! Karen

March 19, 2009 at 5:14 AM

Her barren branches bowed - a beautiful reversal of expectation.

January 31, 2009 at 8:39 PM

Lovely, your words are nicely penned on this one painting a lovely scene...Raul

Maryam Jameela Haniff

January 31, 2009 at 7:17 AM

great! the image n flow is perfect...can't wait for 18 19 20..good luck!..love Maryam

Keith Bickerstaffe

January 31, 2009 at 6:02 AM

Neat alliterations and marvelous word choices... BRAVO Deirdre! Best wishes, Keith

Kristin Reynolds

January 31, 2009 at 2:57 AM

Poor little thing, soon there will be fat worms for her! vivid haiku, Love, Kristin

January 31, 2009 at 12:02 AM

Poor Robin , Deirdre ; But what about Batman ??..... Great & topical 17 , now let's have 18 ....

January 30, 2009 at 1:52 PM

I love this, what a vivid picture of winter that is painted here. Poor little robin! :) Lovely haiku. Blessings... Amy. :)

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