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Haiku

treading carefully
on a bright tulip carpet
rainbow on the ground


3~11-15
Traditional Haiku Contest – Debbie Guzzi
~awarded Honourable Mention~

springhaiku

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David William Breidenthal

March 26, 2015 at 11:43 AM

Beautiful one! I enjoyed this one very much! :) Have a good day! - David

Jan Allison

March 26, 2015 at 12:22 PM

Thanks David:-) hugs Jan xx

Lei Strauss

March 23, 2015 at 5:19 AM

Lovely imagery. :)

Jan Allison

March 23, 2015 at 12:06 PM

Thanks so much Lei:-) Hugs Jan xx

Janet Eaton

March 18, 2015 at 6:40 AM

Congrats on your win Jan. You have painted a beautiful picture. Janet

Jan Allison

March 18, 2015 at 6:46 AM

Just can't seem to get it right at the moment - may take a break for a while:-( Hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

March 16, 2015 at 5:15 PM

Back again to congratulate you on your poem.

Jan Allison

March 16, 2015 at 6:14 PM

Thanks Eve:-) Hugs Jan xx

Willow Lawrence

March 15, 2015 at 2:48 PM

I am not the only one thinking about tulips :) enjoyed this little bit of spring!

Jan Allison

March 15, 2015 at 2:57 PM

Oh I love this time of year Willow after the dreariness of winter the gardens are bursting with spring colours:-) Hugs jan xx

George Aul

March 13, 2015 at 10:02 AM

Congrats to you........ George

Jan Allison

March 13, 2015 at 11:31 AM

Thanks so much George:-) Hugs Jan xx

Jack Ellison

March 13, 2015 at 8:57 AM

Brilliant as usual my dear Jan... a winner in my books! Hugs xxx

Jan Allison

March 13, 2015 at 9:02 AM

Thanks so much Jack:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

March 12, 2015 at 10:16 PM

I saw you telling Armand that this image reminded you of Little House on the Prairie, How I loved that show. Interestingly, that last line happened to be MY favorite!! soupmail for ya.

Jan Allison

March 13, 2015 at 4:01 AM

Thanks Andrea for the feedback I am happy with my poem as it is:-) . In my head I can hear the music to little house on the prairie as I type:-) Hugs Jan xx

Carrie Richards

March 12, 2015 at 7:42 PM

Yay for you, Jan!!......Debbie is a great teacher, and I can see where your beautiful poem was intending to go....these Haikus are so tricky. I am also still a work in progress....and just got lucky this time! I'm so glad she saw the beauty in yours !!

Jan Allison

March 12, 2015 at 7:43 PM

Thanks Carrie I am happy with the write as it is - will aim for perfection with my next one:-) Hugs Jan xx

David Mohn

March 12, 2015 at 7:00 PM

I really like this style of haiku Jan and you paint with bright and beautiful images

Jan Allison

March 12, 2015 at 7:08 PM

Thanks David - it may not have been a top 10 winner but i am happy with the image I portrayed:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

March 12, 2015 at 5:05 PM

Hi Jan, congratulations on your win! I love the imagery in your poem! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison

March 12, 2015 at 5:07 PM

Thanks Sandra congrats to you too:-) Hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

March 12, 2015 at 3:56 PM

Congrats on a fine win Jan...hugs

Jan Allison

March 12, 2015 at 3:58 PM

Many thanks Joseph:-) Hugs Jan xx

Emile Pinet

March 12, 2015 at 3:53 PM

Your words gently take the reader into the scene before them. Emile.

Jan Allison

March 12, 2015 at 3:58 PM

Thanks Emile:-) Hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

March 12, 2015 at 1:39 PM

OMG how adorable is that little girl. A great haiku. A fav!

Jan Allison

March 12, 2015 at 1:41 PM

Armand welcome back so lovely to see you! The image reminded me of Little house on the prairie which I adored as a child:-) Oh I am smiling - am just so much so happy to see you back xxxxx love and hugs Jan xxx