Haiku 43

life of the body touched by fire, your silk skin radiant sunsets life of the mind theory-colored universe time, warping life of the spirit shimmering, shining belief bluest of skies

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Donna Jones

Date: 4/30/2013 10:03:00 PM

Really cool one Jack...

Jack Jordan
Date: 5/1/2013 7:54:00 AM

Thanks, Donna. I appreciate the comment... Jack

Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/30/2013 9:16:00 AM

Your haiku work is a lot more abstract than most. I don't always know where it's taking me yet at the same time I enjoy the ride. First and last are my favorites cause it has more concrete images. On a side note I wonder if there is a way to write a renga with just two poets? If you really wanna try it, it sounds like a much better practice than to jump ahead and try to get 10 other poets to tag along with you... let me know...

Jack Jordan
Date: 4/30/2013 10:01:00 AM

I enjoy the abstraction. Perhaps that has to do with my former life as an architect, and still as a painter. The renga idea sounds okay to me. Let's give it a bit of thought, but it should work.