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Haiku 42

pulling at grass wet with dew - how quickly my world slipped away

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Date: 5/15/2020 9:31:00 PM
This is not toes basking in the grass. This is something else. Stirring ink. xomo
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Date: 10/27/2014 4:14:00 PM
Ohhh and now I also noticed your age....from your work and comments I thought you were older:) // paul
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Date: 10/27/2014 4:12:00 PM
Timothy, at first glance I thought this is about life that goes by fast, like fingers sliding along wet grass....then I scrolled to read the comments and found your version. That's haiku for you! // paul
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Date: 10/21/2014 1:33:00 AM
Interesting, I imagined it was a bug living in the grass and someone came along and plucked the grass leaving it homeless. I must admit I prefer your interpretation of you own work.
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 10/22/2014 11:05:00 AM
Oh how awesome is that! That you'd think of something completely different and yet it fits in just as well. Just goes to show the magnitude of perspective.
Date: 10/20/2014 3:40:00 AM
Great Haiku, but the Haiku in it's concise perimeters always leaves me reading it over and over again to try and read behind the lines-- what the writer is trying to express... "slipping on grass wet with dew as a world slips away"-- I think... is it that the way we often jump into a new circumstance/relationship only to find it slip away unexpectedly?
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 10/20/2014 10:49:00 PM
Haiku can be a bit vague due to the sparse words that go into it. I really enjoy your interpretation of my Haiku, even though it is very different from what I was imagining. In my mind it is about intense grief... a man leaning down by a grave grasping at grass out of frustration at his loss - his world.
Date: 10/19/2014 8:33:00 PM
really beautifully painted timothy
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 10/20/2014 10:47:00 PM
Thank you Liam for reading several of my poems... much appreciated!
Date: 10/19/2014 7:09:00 PM
wow, now THAT is a great comparison in this haiku. Love it, Tim.
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 10/20/2014 10:47:00 PM
Happy you caught on to the connection between 'slip' and 'dew'.
Date: 10/19/2014 6:33:00 AM
I enjoyed the image this creates in the short time you had to describe it, well done
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 10/20/2014 10:46:00 PM
Thanks Casarah for visiting and reading. I'll have to check on your poetry as well :)