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Haiku 42 - 1,2,3,4

1
	a noiseless moment 
	he writes in his diary
	incessant snow  


		2
	every day he hoped   
	every day she avoided…  
	waning moon

		
		3
	his need for love 
	he opened his careless mouth 
	oak tree, splintered


		4
	words that she heard
	anger and bewilderment
	forest inferno

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Timothy Hicks Date: 4/28/2013 12:01:00 AM Well you haven't mentioned sunlight yet... that would top it off nicely :) Login to Reply Jack Jordan Date: 4/28/2013 9:10:00 AM Sorry... No sun in this one.

Donna Jones Date: 4/27/2013 4:31:00 PM These are wonderful Jack....I hope it is a happy ending..guess I'll see... Login to Reply Jack Jordan Date: 4/28/2013 9:10:00 AM I'm sorry... It didn't end happily... Jack

Timothy Hicks Date: 4/27/2013 2:36:00 PM These are some of the best haiku I've read by you. I love that each one has a nature metaphor that so accurately describes the emotions happening in the first two lines. I, too, thought the second one was a bit more intense than the others, but each was special in their own way. Can't wait for the last installment :) Login to Reply Jack Jordan Date: 4/27/2013 3:17:00 PM Tomorrow is it, but I'll bet you can guess the ending... Jack

Poet Destroyer A Date: 4/27/2013 9:15:00 AM Good morning Jack, the second one is my favorite. xox~Linda Login to Reply Jack Jordan Date: 4/27/2013 12:58:00 PM Thanks, Linda. Actually, they are four parts of a five-part relationship tale told in Haiku. The final segment is tomorrow. I think I'll attach a note about my intentions... Jack