Haiku 26

blindfolded kids spinning round 'n' round - candy explosion NOTE: My niece's birthday was today so I imagine you know what this haiku is referring too... lol.

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Kim Van Breda

Date: 5/13/2013 6:34:00 AM

Pin the tail on the donkey or Candy rush? Either way-- very sweet.

Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/13/2013 12:45:00 PM

Think of a pinada filled with candy plus a bunch of kids holding bats... then keep a safe 100 feet distance. LOL! Pleased you liked!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/12/2013 2:06:00 PM

- An explosion of sweets .... speed was high, I think.....lol - Well done,haiku ! - (my last poem: it is from my very first year at school) - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/12/2013 9:58:00 PM

I figured that was the case! And yes the speed was very high... fun birthday :)

Jeremy Martin

Date: 5/12/2013 1:58:00 PM

I know this is likely an innocent poem about some kids playing a game at a party, but something about the blindfolds and going around and around (I imagine faster and faster, dizziness, disorientation), and then the word 'explosion' which connotes harm and danger.. I don't suppose any of this was intended?

Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/12/2013 9:58:00 PM

Jeremy, I can see how you could think that way, but no it was just an innocent little "bat and pinada birthday party". I suppose the words I used like "explosion" doesn't bode well with blindfolds and disorientation... in any case I'm still pleased you got an image from it even if it's not the one I had expected.

Caleah Buil

Date: 5/12/2013 1:28:00 PM

lol! I'm sure that this scene was extremely scary to watch. (I just don't trust kids with bats, haha)

Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/12/2013 9:56:00 PM

Especially when my nephew went all Darth Mal on us with his swinging abilities... LOL!

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/12/2013 1:05:00 PM

Yummy candy! ;) Lovely write, my friend. Those little ones are sweet!

Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/12/2013 9:55:00 PM

Pleased you could enjoy :)

Ndaba Sibanda

Date: 5/12/2013 12:51:00 PM

An interesting exposition of the kids`explosive parties. A hive of activity was skillfully captured here.

Ndaba Sibanda

Date: 5/12/2013 12:25:00 PM

An interesting exposition of the kids`explosive parties. A hive of activity was skillfully captured here.

Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/12/2013 9:54:00 PM

Why thank you Ndaba. Your comments never seize to be interesting as well as thoughtful.

Michael Dom

Date: 5/12/2013 1:16:00 AM

interesting. I can taste the candy shrapnel.

Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/12/2013 8:43:00 AM

Just as long as you didn't get any cavities than you should do fine :) Thanks for stopping by...