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Haiku 24 25 26 About a Shooting Star

shooting across sky lost in immense distance a short lived wish Or falling across sky fading quicker than its light my unheard wish Or a falling star nothing left but darkness

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Skat A

Date: 5/12/2015 1:02:00 PM

PERFECT HAIKU... SKAT

Isaiah Zerbst

Date: 4/22/2013 11:12:00 AM

Finally getting to your new haiku. Good as always! Have you tried switching out the middle lines of 1 and 2? #2 grabs me that way. Just a thought.

Kash Poet

Date: 4/6/2013 4:17:00 PM

shooting star---/once again I forget/my wish-----kash poet :))

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 4/5/2013 8:42:00 PM

Your haikus are so brilliant and vivid. Excellent poetry. Write on! Always, Laura

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 4/4/2013 12:56:00 PM

I had to drop by and say hi dear Charma-- it's been a while since I last saw a shooting star but your haiku, made me think of them-- loved the 3rd one especially... I liked the melancholy here but yes so beautiful...hug and kiss adorable Christina for me please. Thank you

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 4/4/2013 1:09:00 PM

I mean haiku 26 -- ah #26 holds some meaning for me.

Poet Tacito

Date: 4/4/2013 6:15:00 AM

How awesome it is to read your stuff again, let alone seeing your awesome name leaving comments on my work. Fantastic! :) I'm always open for a good piece about the constellations. Great set of Haikus!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/1/2013 3:33:00 PM

charma, I think I got your email? did it say Happy Easter?

David Williams

Date: 4/1/2013 2:50:00 PM

Charma, a great set of haiku's...David

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/1/2013 10:06:00 AM

Three very good in a lovely bouquet!! <3 - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Painted Hunter

Date: 4/1/2013 7:38:00 AM

Dang, your haikus make me jealous!...haha...kidding. They're just soooo good.

Duke Beaufort

Date: 4/1/2013 6:21:00 AM

Charmaine, I do like shooting stars myself. Isn't it funny how they can symbolize so many different things? I love this work. May your wishes come true! Perhaps the unheard wish of the second of these three is because the wish was not yet heard so well inside yourself. That is why the second one is special in its own right! Sometimes I want something and don't really know it or the wish inhabits only part of my being. Anyway--just a thought provoking poem. Thanks

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/31/2013 5:10:00 PM

I love the idea of these. My favorites are one and three. Can't really decide between them. But I just don't like the second as well as those two. Maybe the first is the best. How are you, Charma? Happy Easter to you!

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 3/31/2013 11:10:00 PM

i agree with you re my haiku..my least favourite is the middle one too.I am great dear.I ve sent you an email yesterday..Happy Easter..Hugs