Haiku 1

John's verdant garden, 
Is fraught with thousands of fruit--
Indeed his burden !
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Callus Avatar
September 10, 2016 at 3:02 PM
I like this haiku and the play on words, Sarban! Regards // paul
Warlov Avatar
September 6, 2016 at 6:29 AM
I think "fruits" should be singular, and removing the punctuation, I believe, will improve the phonetics. --- As to John's predicament apropos, the proverb: "Be carful what you wish for, you might get it." --- ©@®™
Bhattacharya Avatar
September 6, 2016 at 6:48 AM
The word 'fruits' is much debated and a few consider this usage to be wrong. So I've changed it, Warlov.
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