Haiku 13

When we’re face to face, meaning holds its pent-up breath. Rescue, then release.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/27/2013 4:43:00 PM

wow, I really likes this one!!!

Jack Jordan
Date: 2/27/2013 5:14:00 PM

Thanks again!

Debra Squyres

Date: 2/19/2013 4:42:00 PM

This brings several meanings to mind... Rescue, then release . What an ahhhh moment.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/18/2013 10:34:00 AM

I had never heard of Haiku poems before I started writing here at PS. - Found some facts about Haiku poems online and think it sounded exciting. - I have not written a lot, but it's fun to write haiku - I like it too. - You're good, Jack, I like yours haiku very well. - Have a nice new week, it's yours! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Jack Jordan
Date: 2/18/2013 10:42:00 AM

Thanks... It looks like it will be a good week. The same to you. I discovered when reading about haiku that the 5-7-5 syllable structure is Westernized, and that in Japanese it depends on other emphases which I don't understand. J

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 2/18/2013 6:25:00 AM

I do love haoku more than any other form....The one above is greatly penned..Charma

Jack Jordan
Date: 2/18/2013 9:44:00 AM

Thanks. I didn't realize how much I enjoyed haiku until I joined the soup. I like the abstraction, the hinting. I also like free verse. I'm not smart enough to do decent rhymes, and am envious of those who are. J

Connie Gildersleeve

Date: 2/17/2013 11:23:00 AM

Very nicely written I use the second two lines almost daily. Warm Smiles, Connie

Jack Jordan
Date: 2/17/2013 11:48:00 AM

Thanks for the comment. I'd love to know the context for your use of those lines. Very interesting... J