Haiku

rays slant at evening
        I am dozing to bee sounds
               shadows move upward

13/05/2018

summersunsunsethaiku

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Connie Marcum Wong

July 22, 2018 at 5:19 PM

I understand this is a winning haiku Jean...it is clear why. I loved it! Congratulations my friend. : )

Jean Murray

July 22, 2018 at 5:31 PM

Thank you Connie. I position my lounger in the sunspot and stay until those shadows cover me completely. Lovely to see you again this evening.

Warren Doll

July 19, 2018 at 8:27 AM

Excellent haiku, Jean. So serene. Well done.// Warren.

Jean Murray

July 19, 2018 at 9:20 AM

Thank you Warren.

Geoffrey Brewer

June 15, 2018 at 12:25 AM

A touch of Yeats’ ‘Lake Isle...,’ very evocative and pleasing, Jean.

Jean Murray

June 15, 2018 at 1:32 AM

That's right Geoffrey. I never thought of that. I have been to see the lake isle. A very calm place.

Line Gauthier

June 5, 2018 at 8:49 PM

Congrats on your win, Jean. Well done.

Jean Murray

June 6, 2018 at 3:59 AM

Thank you Line.

Andrea Dietrich

June 3, 2018 at 5:22 PM

love that line, dozing to bee sounds!! Congrats in the contest

Jean Murray

June 3, 2018 at 6:29 PM

Thank you Andrea.

Susan Gentry

June 3, 2018 at 1:06 AM

Congratulations on your placement in the summer haiku contest!

Jean Murray

June 3, 2018 at 1:31 AM

Thank you Susan.

Anne-Lise Andresen

June 2, 2018 at 7:04 AM

- Congratulations on your Haiku with a great summer theme, Jean :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jean Murray

June 2, 2018 at 7:24 AM

Thank you Sunshine.

David William Breidenthal

May 28, 2018 at 7:52 AM

Cool, marvelous, and serene poem...so cool. -JWE

Jean Murray

May 28, 2018 at 9:15 AM

Thank you for taking the time to comment JW.

Tom Cunningham

May 14, 2018 at 1:44 AM

Lovely time of day Jean, love summer evenings, I dont like it too hot. Must be the Irish in me lol. Tom.

Jean Murray

May 14, 2018 at 3:30 AM

That's what so nice about our summers Tom.....they never get too hot!

Eve Roper

May 13, 2018 at 8:34 PM

nicely done, Jean, at this minute I am truly doze.. luck in the contest.

Jean Murray

May 14, 2018 at 3:29 AM

I know how you feel Eve. I am learning the joys of forty winks.

Andrea Dietrich

May 13, 2018 at 4:08 PM

very nicely described evening of summer, Jean.

Jean Murray

May 13, 2018 at 4:35 PM

Thank you for stopping by for a visit this fine evening Andrea.

Jan Allison

May 13, 2018 at 3:47 PM

what lovely imagery Jean and summer is fast approaching!:-) hugs jan xx

Jean Murray

May 13, 2018 at 4:35 PM

Can't you feel it in the air Jan? It is so short. I see in the kigo description, summer is 6th of May to 7th of August.

Vijay Pandit

May 13, 2018 at 3:41 PM

Well depicted imagery in your haiku Jean..sights and sounds of the evening.

Jean Murray

May 13, 2018 at 3:47 PM

Thank you Vijay. There is a certain spot in my garden that gets the last of the summer light before twilight.

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