Haiku

rays slant at evening
        I am dozing to bee sounds
               shadows move upward

13/05/2018

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/22/2018 5:19:00 PM

I understand this is a winning haiku Jean...it is clear why. I loved it! Congratulations my friend. : )

Jean Murray
Date: 7/22/2018 5:31:00 PM

Thank you Connie. I position my lounger in the sunspot and stay until those shadows cover me completely. Lovely to see you again this evening.

Warren Doll

Date: 7/19/2018 8:27:00 AM

Excellent haiku, Jean. So serene. Well done.// Warren.

Jean Murray
Date: 7/19/2018 9:20:00 AM

Thank you Warren.

Geoffrey Brewer

Date: 6/15/2018 12:25:00 AM

A touch of Yeats’ ‘Lake Isle...,’ very evocative and pleasing, Jean.

Jean Murray
Date: 6/15/2018 1:32:00 AM

That's right Geoffrey. I never thought of that. I have been to see the lake isle. A very calm place.

Line Gauthier

Date: 6/5/2018 8:49:00 PM

Congrats on your win, Jean. Well done.

Jean Murray
Date: 6/6/2018 3:59:00 AM

Thank you Line.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/3/2018 5:22:00 PM

love that line, dozing to bee sounds!! Congrats in the contest

Jean Murray
Date: 6/3/2018 6:29:00 PM

Thank you Andrea.

Susan Gentry

Date: 6/3/2018 1:06:00 AM

Congratulations on your placement in the summer haiku contest!

Jean Murray
Date: 6/3/2018 1:31:00 AM

Thank you Susan.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/2/2018 7:04:00 AM

- Congratulations on your Haiku with a great summer theme, Jean :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jean Murray
Date: 6/2/2018 7:24:00 AM

Thank you Sunshine.

J.W. Earnings

Date: 5/28/2018 7:52:00 AM

Cool, marvelous, and serene poem...so cool. -JWE

Jean Murray
Date: 5/28/2018 9:15:00 AM

Thank you for taking the time to comment JW.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 5/14/2018 1:44:00 AM

Lovely time of day Jean, love summer evenings, I dont like it too hot. Must be the Irish in me lol. Tom.

Jean Murray
Date: 5/14/2018 3:30:00 AM

That's what so nice about our summers Tom.....they never get too hot!

Eve Roper

Date: 5/13/2018 8:34:00 PM

nicely done, Jean, at this minute I am truly doze.. luck in the contest.

Jean Murray
Date: 5/14/2018 3:29:00 AM

I know how you feel Eve. I am learning the joys of forty winks.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/13/2018 4:08:00 PM

very nicely described evening of summer, Jean.

Jean Murray
Date: 5/13/2018 4:35:00 PM

Thank you for stopping by for a visit this fine evening Andrea.

Jan Allison

Date: 5/13/2018 3:47:00 PM

what lovely imagery Jean and summer is fast approaching!:-) hugs jan xx

Jean Murray
Date: 5/13/2018 4:35:00 PM

Can't you feel it in the air Jan? It is so short. I see in the kigo description, summer is 6th of May to 7th of August.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 5/13/2018 3:41:00 PM

Well depicted imagery in your haiku Jean..sights and sounds of the evening.

Jean Murray
Date: 5/13/2018 3:47:00 PM

Thank you Vijay. There is a certain spot in my garden that gets the last of the summer light before twilight.

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