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Haiku 08

rainy gray day
lightning strikes the ground...
drum roll

6/10/12

Copyright © Phyllis Babcock | Year Posted 2012

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Keith Bickerstaffe

July 9, 2012 at 4:07 PM

Nifty long 'a' assonance in your first line...'drum roll' brings a note of trepidation to your piece! Well done, Phyl!! Best wishes, Keith :))

June 15, 2012 at 11:39 AM

Hi Phyllis! I meant what I wrote....let me know and I can call and walk u thru any computer stuff over the phone...The juxto on this haiku is super duper ~Love, Gwendolen

Andrea Dietrich

June 11, 2012 at 10:25 PM

HI, Phyllis. thanks for your comment today!

Elizabeth Wesley

June 11, 2012 at 11:20 AM

The drum roll is a perfect description. If you continue with this talent you will be entering contests and winning! :)

Andrea Dietrich

June 10, 2012 at 9:09 PM

I like this too, but the other is my favorite! Nice seeing your sweet comments today and to see you had these two haiku up.

James Marshall Goff

June 10, 2012 at 2:02 PM

Beautifully accurate Phyl! Jimbo

Barbara Gorelick

June 10, 2012 at 1:47 PM

Love those days...great description. BG

Anne-Lise Andresen

June 10, 2012 at 12:26 PM

sunshine here :) - well done ! - oxox love Anne-Lise

June 10, 2012 at 12:12 PM

Very descriptive about a thunder and lightning storm..Great work..Thanks for stopping by, reading, and taking time to comment on my work..Sara

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