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Haiga

large pod of dolphins
a silver arc ... then a splash
sun peeks through white clouds

5/5/18

natureoceanhaiku

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Sonia Walker

May 13, 2018 at 5:26 PM

Jan, lovely haiku. Congratulations. Hugs, Sonia

Jan Allison

May 13, 2018 at 5:31 PM

Thanks Sonia:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

May 13, 2018 at 2:51 PM

Cool win, Jan. Congrats to you. I hope I can figure out about metaphors in the haiku. I have one I want to post but not sure he will see it as purely descriptive or metaphorical.

Jan Allison

May 13, 2018 at 5:30 PM

Thanks Andrea, I just write and hope I get it right, am sure you will write a beauty:-) hugs Jan xx

Moon Flower

May 12, 2018 at 11:21 PM

This is fantastic, Jan. Congrats on your fine win! hugs

Jan Allison

May 13, 2018 at 5:30 PM

Thanks Moon flower:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf

May 12, 2018 at 11:07 PM

Perfect delphinium description! Congrats on your trophy win, Jan! :) gw

Jan Allison

May 13, 2018 at 5:29 PM

Thanks Gershon:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

May 12, 2018 at 7:37 PM

Such fine imagery in your Haiku, Jan. Congratulations on your First Place win. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison

May 13, 2018 at 5:29 PM

Thanks Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

May 12, 2018 at 4:02 PM

Back for congrats!

Jan Allison

May 12, 2018 at 4:08 PM

Thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

May 12, 2018 at 2:26 PM

Gorgeous imagery, I wish I was there :) Congratulations on your win! xomo

Jan Allison

May 12, 2018 at 4:08 PM

Thanks Mo:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

May 12, 2018 at 8:28 AM

- Congratulations on your great first place in the contest, Jan :) - Happy Weekend - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison

May 12, 2018 at 4:07 PM

Thanks Anne-Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham

May 12, 2018 at 2:29 AM

Big congratulations Jan. Tom.

Jan Allison

May 12, 2018 at 4:07 PM

Thanks Tom:-) hugs Jan xx

Line Gauthier

May 11, 2018 at 11:12 PM

Back with well deserved congrats, Jan.

Jan Allison

May 12, 2018 at 4:06 PM

Thanks Line:-) I'm delighted to place so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

May 11, 2018 at 11:05 PM

Great Haiku, Jan, congratulations on your win.. Hugs Eve

Jan Allison

May 12, 2018 at 4:06 PM

Thanks Eve:-):-) hugs Jan xx

Mick Talbot

May 11, 2018 at 10:00 PM

Congratulations Jan, beautiful haiga, the juxtaposition, a surprise, a perfect haiku! hugs Mick

Jan Allison

May 12, 2018 at 4:05 PM

Thanks Mick:-) I'm delighted to place so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

May 9, 2018 at 11:18 AM

Very lovely imagery, Jan. The dolphins' arc could be compared to a rainbow heralding better things to come (the sun peeping out). Hugs // paul

Mick Talbot

May 11, 2018 at 10:08 PM

Yes, Paul, you can add a haiga/picture, Jan is correct sponsors won't see until the contest is finalised. Regards haiku with a haiga please do use the former it will let the sponsor know there is an accompanying image. Mick

Jan Allison

May 9, 2018 at 11:54 AM

All the sponsor sees is the words , they can only see the pic if they visit the poem and hopefully that is after the contest is judged lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

May 9, 2018 at 11:20 AM

Have just seen Susan's comment....is it possible to add the picture to the poem, same as when one adds a video?

Pandita Sietesantos

May 7, 2018 at 12:41 PM

Brilliant haiga! You paint an awesome picture with this piece! Beautiful! Hugs. Pandita

Jan Allison

May 7, 2018 at 12:43 PM

Thanks Pandita:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May

May 5, 2018 at 9:26 PM

Nice imagery Jan

Jan Allison

May 6, 2018 at 11:05 AM

Thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

May 5, 2018 at 8:55 PM

Very beautiful!

Jan Allison

May 6, 2018 at 11:04 AM

Thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Line Gauthier

May 5, 2018 at 8:25 PM

Lovely, Jan. This is definitely one of my favorite forms: the interplay of a spectacular photo with a "breath" of poetry invites the reader to stay in the moment bouncing from photo to words. There is something so satisfying about the experience.

Jan Allison

May 6, 2018 at 4:15 AM

Wow Line you sure were inspired by your haiku group, I think that's the best comment I've ever received on one of my attempts at this form which I struggle writing:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

May 5, 2018 at 8:01 PM

I think you came up with a very nice entry, Jan!! Good on you!

Jan Allison

May 5, 2018 at 8:03 PM

Thanks Andrea I never know if I've written a proper ku, had a few published in the past so i must be getting something right lol:-) hugs jan x

Arturo Michael

May 5, 2018 at 7:24 PM

Nice...good imagery and vibrations...All the best Jan

Jan Allison

May 5, 2018 at 7:33 PM

thanks Arturo:-) hugs jan xx

Matthew Anish

May 5, 2018 at 7:08 PM

Fine picture of marine life here! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Jan Allison

May 5, 2018 at 7:11 PM

Thanks Matthew:-) hugs jan xx

Ilene Bauer

May 5, 2018 at 3:24 PM

lovely poem and great picture, jan! i never heard of haiga before - i gather from one of the comments it's a haiku with a picture attached?

Jan Allison

May 5, 2018 at 3:28 PM

Yes it's not something I've not heard of either until I read the rules and as the sponsor can't see the picture only the poem it would be better to call them all haiku:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham

May 5, 2018 at 3:10 PM

Brilliant image Jan, I forgot to mention I saw a pod off Gibraltar swim towards the ship. Good luck. Tom.

Jan Allison

May 5, 2018 at 3:14 PM

oh how wonderful Tom its a marvelous sight to see, I'd love to see them again, we saw them once too:-) hugs jan xx

Robertina B.

May 5, 2018 at 2:55 PM

Beautiful Haiku followed by beautiful dolphins.. Fantastic Jan!!

Jan Allison

May 5, 2018 at 2:56 PM

Thanks Robertina:-) hugs jan xx

Eileen Manassian

May 5, 2018 at 1:39 PM

:) Lovely sweety. Love dolphins. So majestic....I love the clouds and sun and sea...so this is lovely for me. Thanks for the visit. Did you read the blog on Jack Ellison? Give it a read...Hugs

Jan Allison

May 5, 2018 at 1:57 PM

Thanks Eileen. I tend to stay away from blogs can't stand the negativity some people bring to the site... its no wonder people leave but rest assured I am here to stay:-) hugs jan xx

Susan Gentry

May 5, 2018 at 1:26 PM

Beautiful haiku!! I can't decide about the haiku or haigu. I think I'm going back to haiku since whoever judges doesn't see the pics anyway. What's your take on this?

Jan Allison

May 5, 2018 at 1:34 PM

I agree with you they should just be called haiku as they can't see the pic and I write the poems then find a pic to accompany the poem:-) hugs jan xx

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