John Lawless Poet Verse

Grief - For Contest

Grief
gnaws at my aching heart
greets my awakening,
grins within the sunbeams
gathers empty teardrops
garnished with memory’s
gaunt unfocused vision
goring life’s bloodied bull.


11/22/2015

submitted to – Pleiades, Please – poetry contest
sponsor – Kim Merryman

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Dr. Upma A. Sharma November 30, 2015 at 3:19 AM Congrats John.. wonderful write n win!

Sandra Haight November 29, 2015 at 8:34 AM John, congratulations on your fine win in Kim's contest. Sandra

Alexis Y. November 28, 2015 at 7:15 PM John, congratulations on your win:-)Alexis

Skat A November 28, 2015 at 3:27 PM John, Congrats on your fine win, SKAT LOVE

John Lawless November 28, 2015 at 6:56 AM Thanks Lin, always nice to hear from you.

Lin Lane November 28, 2015 at 6:33 AM Excellent pleiade, John. ..especially like the first line. Congratulations. John Lawless November 28, 2015 at 6:59 AM thanks Lin, nice to hear from you.

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores November 28, 2015 at 5:29 AM Congratulations John John Lawless November 28, 2015 at 6:55 AM Thanks Nayda

Eve Roper November 27, 2015 at 11:36 PM Congratulations on your win, John, very sad! Eve John Lawless November 28, 2015 at 6:55 AM very sad, Eve, but a part of everyones life at one time or another. thanks for stopping by to read and comment.

Connie Marcum Wong November 27, 2015 at 7:05 PM EXCELLENT! I loved this entry John. Congratulations on your wonderful win! John Lawless November 27, 2015 at 7:45 PM Thanks Connie always good to hear from you.

Jill Spagnola November 27, 2015 at 5:13 PM ..:) John Lawless November 27, 2015 at 7:43 PM my emoticons went out to lunch...so....thanks Jill

Jan Allison November 27, 2015 at 5:03 PM Dropping back with my congrats:-) hugs Jan xx John Lawless November 27, 2015 at 7:42 PM Thanks, as always, Jan

Kim Merryman November 27, 2015 at 3:39 PM John, an excellent description of grief! Each line packs an emotional punch! Congrats on your win and on learning a new poetry form! Love, Kim John Lawless November 27, 2015 at 7:42 PM Kim, thanks for taking the time to administer the contest and torment the muse with new and devious poetic forms

Lin Lane November 22, 2015 at 5:24 PM All good lines, John. The last one is terrific. John Lawless November 27, 2015 at 7:41 PM Thanks Lin.

Andrea Dietrich November 22, 2015 at 4:58 PM wow, I really love the inventive way you did this form. Great job. John Lawless November 27, 2015 at 7:40 PM Thanks Andrea for reading and commenting I appreciate your continued support.

Jan Allison November 22, 2015 at 4:40 PM You depicted grief so well John - good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx7 John Lawless November 27, 2015 at 7:39 PM Not a pleasant topic but of late have seen to many suffering too much in my opinion.